The Road

I waited for his embrace in

The dreary, midnight clearing.

Yet, as the bleak wind chilled my skin,

I saw that dawn was nearing.

Atop the hill, my view remained

Unobstructed all around.

The oak tree's roots became restraints

And to the earth I was bound.

I cried my pain out to the stars.

The struggle of solitude

Sliced deep to leave hideous scars

That left my body subdued.

I fell to my knees and gave way

To the agonizing pain.

Abandoned, it is there I stayed

As the clouds rolled in rain.

He never came to rescue me.

I withered away to dust,

Yet it gave me a chance to see

That I had misplaced my trust.

Too late then to change my choices,

I lied content, in death, free

Of the lying, nagging voices

That had overpowered me.

With raw skin, my chains did slacken,

Leaving my arms freely go.

'Though my soul was ever blackened,

I was then able to know

The stories I heard of his greed

Were as true as the games played.

Yet I, too naive to take heed,

Had ventured straight to the fray

Where tricks and pain controlled my days;

Seeping to each grimy night.

My whimpering pleas were swept away;

With no pleasant end in sight

Until on the black horizon

Shone a bright and golden hue.

I walked the path for days and on

And the road led me to you.

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

A good poem on the concept of love. Very descriptive and good use of wording. I usually hate poetry about Love but you managed to grab my attention with this. I have no complaints about any part of this. Good job!

[@zeewhykay]

Woah ! The talent in the youngsters on the café never cease to impress me ! Please do yourself ( and all us readers ) by going to school and working on your craft, you already have a extremely solid base.

''I fell to my knees and gave way
To the agonizing pain.
Abandoned, it is there I stayed
As the clouds rolled in rain.''

Definitely my favorite stanza. The pace is great and it basically reads itself.

Somehow, no good comes of waiting for people. Either they'll catch up to you, or meet you side by side on the highway. But waiting only hinders ourselves, in my opinion.

Well done, well crafted. Cheers !

[Courtney]

Wow thanks so much! I would absolutely love to go to college and actually take classes on writing poetry (I plan on doing just that this next year x) I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and that you see so much in my writing. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :) xx

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Wow you painted a depth here! I see so many things play out, I see the scar you speak of yet I have seen many other scars in my life, I fell to my knees, I like this sound biblical speaking to fall to ones knees in a storm. He did not come. That could play out two ways a man didn't come or God didn't come. We wont speak so much Of God , but He always comes:) I think we want things to take place right there and than, but some times it just don't happen that way. Where would we be right now if not for hurts and sorrows, blames and shames, good and bad, deep and sad? Its all part of the deal. We cant learn an easy way but in times we are faced with other things and in the end we can say I learn from that storm faced my way, never shall I allow it again. At times we bleed to death before ever learning. your end was awesome-And the road led me to you:)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) I love it:) You should be proud of this write because it speaks very profound:)

[Courtney]

If you take the meaning to be of God (and I would most certainly agree that it bodes strongly of that!) then I personally see it more as.. Waiting for something and then the light led to God himself ("you"). It could also just as easily be about one man leaving only to find a better one. I like to leave the ambiguity. Makes it all subjective so more people can relate ;) Thank you sooo much for reading and taking the time to review! It truly means a lot :) xx

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There is a time for every one and everything:) Just glad something pulled me to it:) It was my pleasure:)