Bruised Heart

Roaring noise above the sound

Of a broken heart

Corrupt sheriff makes his round

Severed from the start

Flooding tears flow down the street

Agony of pain

Chills the bone with blinding heat

Composure to feign

Feeble rays of covered sun

Trapped behind the cloud

You can't hide but you can run

'Fore wind removes shroud

My heart, my gut, forever bruised

A pawn, which simply has been used.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Well, you have used some of my favorite words in a poem. bad girl!! lol ....I'm kidding. I wanted to read you and wasn't thinking of commenting, but you are so beautiful when you are writing such lines as these. Especially when you are writing your quatrains with such heart, and short, sharp, and beautiful waves of this symphony-like to and fro roller coaster of emotions. That couplet in the end.... I'm not sure if it is because I read your poem about 5 times for whatever reason that cannot be so easily defined, even by another fellow poet who is used to crafting such words to get a point across and opinion to your creation, buuuut it was perfect!! It was perfect because each new quatrain introduced me to "hearing" you inside your poem, and when I read the couplet in the end, I was transported back to each quatrain to relive and experience the poem all over again. You trapped me!! lol What a gorgeous poem.... it may come across as dark to some and even romantic to others. I have found this poem to be romantic and selfishly wish I had been in my classiest of clothes atop a castle wall in a warm breeze to hear you read this to me when the sun is setting. ...sorry. I had to write that. : ) It is what I was picturing when reading you. Beautiful, Courtney... xoxo -Mark

[Courtney]

This was amazing to come on here and see! Thanks so much for the support and appreciation! And the end bit about the castle just made my day :) Thank you so much! :) xx

[Patrick Henry]

You are welcome, accidentally. : ) You happen upon me and I don't know how to NOT tell you how you affect me, Courtney!! Atop that castle wall is where I was in about 3 of your poems.... Occasionally, with the wind picking up and that hair of yours blowing with the sun playing peek-a-boo behind your shoulders as it sets, is this beautiful voice of yours reading your poetry that makes me the most comfortable I could possibly be in such a moment as that. Such a thing can happen. It is not reserved for Fairy tales and legends. There are still castles, me in this world, your beautiful poetry, the sun... thankfully!, and time to do these things for all the right reasons, Courtney!! : ) I almost wrote "I Love You". lol I am happy with you as where I am not so in most places... : ) Thank YOU!! xoxo -Your Mark

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I really love Ur poems the rhyming is fantastic. Full of emotion and allot of ur poems full of pain. Its a little confusing coz u say ur such a happy cheerful person but your poems are full of pain. Still a great write enjoyed reading this one also keep writing u have real talent

[Courtney]

Don't worry, it's confusing to me too :P Up until recently I honestly was always happy, and my writing always seems to be so dark!! Ahh well. Thank you so much for the appreciation, and thank you so much for reading my work xx :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

HAHAHA all good yer been having a really s**t past few days myself, u write how u feel of course :)
If u need anyone to talk to id love to listen :)
Ur most welcome anytime :)

[AlexValkyrie]

I especially love the very last line. It puts things into perspective.

Great work. I loved it. :)