Crimson Smile

Crimson smile that you share

Murder at the tips

Showing publicly you dare

Bloody dripping lips

Pride in your work does shine true

Pleasure in the pain

Leaving them with not a clue

Leaving morals vain

Remorse is nowhere in sight

Slaughter fresh in scent

Adrenaline's pumping height

Back to Hell you sent

Death has held; the blood does bind

Smiling darkly; trapped in your mind

Reviews

[Robert Malcom]

love it. it sounds like a subtle love letter to a serial killer... in a good way :)

[Courtney]

Thanks so much! Glad you took something from it :) Thanks for reading! xx :)

[Robert Malcom]

yessss! I like that kinda stuff :P hehe good job!

[Courtney]

Haha! Well good because I do to! :P thanks again!

[Sourav]

Great depiction and very well structured. Lovely poem - love this kind of intense writing!

[Courtney]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

[zainul]

A neat piece with a lovely presentation.

[Courtney]

Thank you :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome :)

[Chelle]

The dark theme of this poem is greatly expressed by gruesome and disturbing details. Yet the most shuddering part is the owner of the crimson smile is unknown and it can be interpreted in a number of ways. What is it exactly? A vampire? A demon? A murderer? A cannibal? It can be an entire list of things yet the mystery may remain unsolved but that's the beauty of it~

Overall, a nice chiller of a poem with a smooth flow. The only thing that threw me off was the rhythm was a little iffy in the last two lines. You may want to revise it to where the syllables match between "blood does bind" and "trapped in your mind". Other than that, nice!

[Courtney]

Thanks for the appreciation :) I went through and revised the last line, let me know if you think it helped! Glad you enjoyed it xx

[Nix]

WOW! This flows perfectly. This is very well written. It leaves room for interpretation but it shoves you in the right direction. Great job.

[Courtney]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[AlexValkyrie]

That was dark and intriguing. Your style of writing is gripping and I can't stop reading. You've done very well. :)

[Courtney]

Thank you so much! :) That means so much xx