See Me.

Look into unknowing eyes

Dark secret inside

Seeing my much practiced lies;

Past each tear I've cried

Long to scream out, in my pain

Begging them to see

Sanity swirls down the drain

Once best part of me

Slices deep til blood I taste

Where now do I stand?

Look at myself; now but waste

Dealt by my own hand

Sit in the corner all alone

Pay for that which I did condone

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very moving and interesting read i liked it :)

[NITHIN PURPLE]

enigmatic............

[Porter]

The first thing I noticed that I actually really like is the fact that you left out the "I's" where they should be (in a grammatically correct sentence anyway). I think it adds to the disappearing sanity you talk about in the second stanza. Second, I think all the rhymes sound very natural together. Something that always bothers me is when rhymes sound forced, which isn't the case in this poem. Awesome write! ~Never forget