Internal Recession

This day has turned black

I feel wracked with depression

Motivation to lack

During internal recession

My smile has all but disappeared

I struggle to fake one at all

My mind is nothing; cannot be cleared

In a deep pit, began I to fall

Even that which I most adore

Cannot calm what lies inside

My motivation is here no more

Right now a monster to reside

I wish I could free myself from this torment

Before it began it's ravaging torrent

Reviews

[KMadden]

i really like this poem, it's beautifully written. If you would care to review my story?

[TheDuchessDiary]

I like the way you write it. Though it has a heavy content, It's just short, light and easy to read. Are you feeling like this for real?

[Courtney]

That was my goal, adding simplicity to a heavy thing. I did write as I feel.

[TheDuchessDiary]

Awww... I'm sorry to hear that. Let me give you a *Big Hug* (^^,)

[Courtney]

:) haha thank you ^-^ just made it better

[Perri]

For such a heavily topic, you've avoided the tackiness that works its way into these kind of writings...well done there.
I think I began would be better than inversion began I...I know it was poetic inversion, but my reading flow just hiccoughed a bit on that line.
Otherwise good =]