Attention Grabber?

As a book opening.. Thoughts?

Walking slowly down the road, I don't have any thought to look back. At least, this is what I tell myself. I make a silent vow to return; to save the innocence of the children who remain. Though the youth of today is not valued, the shunning of me will not save the forsaken. It will not change the fact that as I have acted out directly against the Doyen, I can no longer act from the inside. My one bag in hand, I close my eyes, blinking back my white hot rage; calming the monster that lies within me. Walking slowly down the road, I don't have any thought to look back...

Author's Note

Any thoughts?

Reviews

[Lady of the Lake]

This is a good opening for a book because it catches the readers' attention with all of the questions that pop up (Who are the Doyen? Why is the main character leaving? Why does she feel that these children are her responsibility?). It's also good because you're not giving TOO much information which would confuse and thus alienate potential readers, and you're giving yourself the opportunity to answer these questions later on :)
Anyway, that's what I honestly think - I could be wrong - but I think it's good :)
Keep up the good work!

[Courtney]

Thank you so much! I'm glad to hear my point was put across. I will probably continue to write this and post it on here :) Thank you

[Lady of the Lake]

No problem! I'll try to read the rest when you post it :)

[Jordan's Back]

Interesting Preface, a gripping idea for a book :)

[Marie]

Change your opening sentence. Write "I don't have any thought to look back as I walk slowly down the road." This makes a positive statement.