Ode to Female Nature

Embrace the beauty of women, in a wholly natural way.

The mystical, but ineffable portrayal of her face

Was one to be remembered eternally in my soul

For had I not taken back my steps towards her place

I would have not concluded my goal.

 

La femme cependant de sa bouche de fraise,

En se tordant ainsi qu’un serpent sur la braise,

Is but a metonymic portrayal of her beauty,

To which the nine circles of hell cannot attribute cruelty.

 

Yet writers such as Wordsworth and Blake admire her nature,

But she remains unaware that her wholeness is my rapture.

She is the apple of Eden

Yet this enjambment does but weaken

As my love to her embellishes, replenishes, fulfils, ills.

 

The apex of renaissance has claimed to have never acquired Romantics

I perhaps believe it is time to conspire Semantics

As I lay upon her silky skin the Dramatics

Or maybe perhaps Adorno’s Dialectics.

 

Whether this be an ode to her existence

Or a preservation of my insistence,

I will forever believe she had me from birth

Her love is nothing but a beautiful curse.

Reviews

[Julie Spade]

"Her love is nothing but a beautiful curse" is an excellent conclusion ! The story is filled with imagery, suspense and dark beauty which is an amazing combination..maybe you are influenced by Poes obscureness as I read it, it reminded me of him ! Keep it going, Victor, you are on the right track!

[misha]

Beautiful write. Great job!

[Enigma]

Je suis très heureux de cette pièce! C'était tellement beau et élégant (:

[James Hades]

Merci :) ca fait plaisir de pouvoir rendre mes readers heureux!

[Penny]

This poem is too great to be reviewedby a rookie like me. Hats off! Salute! Standing applause!

[Dayran]

In giving to ourselves ... we give but half our love ... but in giving it to a woman ... we receive it all. A brooding poem ... about issues at the crossroads of love ... in which we have to walk both paths in the plain experience of one person. Nicely done.

[wordman]

and then popped in you know who and spoiled the hell out of them lol

[Tarella]

Just read your poem again...and it had twice the effect from when I read it before...so once again,good job

[rutherford]

Agree with Julie below--bet line for me was the last.

[Raymond Federle]

This was a wonderful ode. Enjoyable from start to finish and it ends with a POW! Excellent! :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Yet writers such as Wordsworth and Blake admire her nature,

But she remains unaware that her wholeness is my rapture.

She is the apple of Eden



Loved your expression !
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