Like Humans Do

We created God in our image,

crafting him to look, act,

see, touch, care, know, speak

like

humans do,

never asking him

whether or not he approves

of our assessment, never checking for errors

or wondering if he is bothered

by this confusion.

Never wondering if he is a he or

a she or an it,

perhaps an ape or a

sunlit cloud

or a maple leaf,

a dustmite

upon our

pillowcase.

We may snore on him every night

(or s**t on him in the morning)

all the while praying up above, perhaps to

nothing more than the

midnight sky.

We crafted God in our image,

creating an omnipotent

puppet

marionette

who lives, does, says, goes, speaks, cares,

knows, looks

like humans do,

calling him Father even though

he may go by an entirely

different

name.

Reviews

[Louise Whalen]

So far, this has been my favorite piece that I've read on this site.

The theme is so innovative and fresh. It inspires a lot of thought, and leaves the reader really pondering what you wrote. That makes for excellent poetry, I must conclude.

I loved this passage:

"Never wondering if he is a he or
she or it
perhaps an ape or a
sunlit cloud
or a maple leaf or a dustmite
upon our
pillowcase."

because the imagery is fantastic, and, again, unique.

Your description of Goid's actions: "who lives does says goes speaks cares" is also great. The way it is all jumbled together but yet flows is brilliant.

The ending is slightly weak compared to the rest of your poem, but it is still good.

Overall, fabulous job!

[Legion]

HEY! Careful there! You might get thrown into a bunch of pigs. :)


Good piece though and excellent point. I've spoken of this to many a people in my day. Well written. Going into my favorites.

[Louise Whalen]

Oh, I wanted to add that your title is good, but it doesn't really do it enough justice. For all the powerful themes in the poem, you need a slightly more powerful title. But that's just my opinion.

Oh, and I loved your blurb above your poem. "We crafted God in our image." That's what caught my attention and led me to reading the poem in the first place. I think that might be a better title, but again, just an idea.

[WritefromtheHeart]

This is such a wise poem....it encompasses all that we "humans do" in the name of religion...every single ugly and beautiful thing!!! And all the while, most of us never know that God (by whatever name we call him or her) is within us all of the time.