Poison Kiss

You're the sweetest temptation...

Heavenly bliss
how I love your
poison kiss.
Dangerous bite
this temptation
I can't fight.
Delicious treat
oh thy lips
taste so sweet.
Forbidden fruit
your movements
leave me mute.
Slow transgressions
lead to naughty
indiscretions.

Author's Note

A little experimentation, and I must say that I quite like the result. I am always welcome to comments, thoughts and concerns.

Reviews

[Michael X]

tantalyzing and sultry, a seduction of sweet escape, i love the imagery
of the apple, as it reminds me of the garden of Edan, the entire
feeling is sensuous and mysterious, the word Heaven gives ur poem a
celestial feeling and the flow s captivating because its so sort yet
the grammar really suites the form, awsome job, a 100

[poetic soul]

wow! nice! true to the hilt...

[melissa]

hot! i like:)

[Bard Constantine]

Nice to catch up to you and your words, Krystina. This was a nice nip of the sultry and seductive... one can almost hear the words in a hushed whisper...

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This is a sensous write, which is very enjoyable. I like the structure as well.

[Kelley]

Very Sensual I like......smile
I might change that thy in the middle
sounds funny

Over anther great poem.
Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Dream Weaver]

Sultry sensual and soothing, beautiful flow...
love it..

[loowzerX]

haha very cool write.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes those dangerous temptations can be an undeniable force... I like it,quick simple verses that express so much.

[Crow]

Very well done; truth in few words, but overflows with meaning.