The Grim Raven

The Grim Raven

A Poem by Ebb and Flow
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When an unliving creature ushers the dead...

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Never was there a more perfect bird,
whose actions never seem too absurd.
Ebony wings and c**k of the head,
a feathered friend who migrates the dead.

A sentry of sorts, the guiding way,
ushering corpses so they can't stay.
How fitting a graveyard be his home,
with plenty of food he never roam.

Each life that passes must pay a toll,
the debt to be paid must be a soul.
To sustain his own life he must feed,
eating the dead is a nasty deed.

From high in his perch he can see all,
making sure there's no delay, no stall.
The flow of bodies must be steady,
for any uproar he is ready.

No one to trespass upon his land,
but ever ready to take a stand.
The raven will fight 'til he is gone,
the grim reaper but a mighty pawn.

He never stays dead for very long,
his body revived through raven song.
In his small murder he is the lead,
assisting the gone who are in need.

© 2010 Ebb and Flow


Author's Note

Ebb and Flow
Questions, comments, concerns. This is a lengthy poem...sort of. I have a feeling there's more to be added to it. Also I know I repeat dead a lot, but there's no suitable substitute without reworking the whole line in some cases. Any feedback would be welcomed. =)
*The raven just happens to be my favorite bird, and a poem about one is long overdue. Although dark and somewhat gruesome I feel that this will be what I want it to be.
I think this new photo is more befitting of this poem.
*Credit to the artist.

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Very good piece. I loved the last stanza especially: "He never stays dead for very long,
his body revived through raven song.
In his small murder he is the lead,
assisting the gone who are in need." Perfect ending and great wording for the whole thing! Just one thing. In the first stanza did you mean "too absurd"? "to" doesn't seem to fit. Other than that, I adored it!

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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A very good poem. Enjoyed it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow, i'm like speechless. I've always appreciated Death God's, Grim Reapers, Soul Collectors and to see them be molded into a character, be given life, through your poem, so much respect for you. Very well written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ebb and Flow

11 Years Ago

I have no problem with that!! After I get my poetry stuff out of storage, I plan on doing one simil.. read more
KeeD

11 Years Ago

its Called Possession and part 2 is Eternal Damnation
Ebb and Flow

11 Years Ago

I will check them out!
So far this is the best poem I've read in a long time.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ebb and Flow

11 Years Ago

Thank you.
A very strong piece. Great imagery,creative..

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ebb and Flow

11 Years Ago

Thank you! It is by far one of my better pieces.
Fabulous write.
You have used your amazing imagination to create this lovely piece.
The stanzas are well built and my favorite one is:
"No one to trespass upon his land,
but ever ready to take a stand.
The raven will fight 'til he is gone,
the grim reaper but a mighty pawn."


Posted 12 Years Ago


This is beautifully dark... I know the raven has long been associated with death and I believe it is the watcher of the down and out... but your description of this mysterious bird is captivating and eloquent with a touch of wit.

this is my favorite stanza...

Each life that passes must pay a toll,
the debt to be paid must be a soul.
To sustain his own life he must feed,
eating the dead is a nasty deed.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the way you captured this Scandanavian/European facet of Ravendom. I feel your vision is being shackled a bit by the prison of rhyme. While ravens and rhyming go hand in hand, I believe your excellent narration would shine brighter if unfettered by a rhyme scheme. Very good poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I'm at a complete loss for words. This poem is absolutely amazing. I had to read it over multiple times just to grasp the whole story and concept behind. You are an amazing writer and it would be a horrid loss if you ever stopped. You've been given an amazing talent.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

breathtaking, and that is my firt impression, the opening description of
the birds character is such a word crafting image of splendor,
you've captured the dramatic agle, and the reader can fully visualize
the personality, the bird of graveyards, haunting and brilliant.
so may amazing lines :)
To sustain his own life he must feed,
eating the dead is a nasty deed.



Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a great idea. Creative and filled with intruige. Great job!! 99/100

Posted 14 Years Ago



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