Of Dying

Wave Waltz written for a contest =)

Head
wheeling
slow
ideas
escaping
away
clouds
drifting
distance grows
waves numbing sense
confusion
playing
games
hearing
silent earth
breath gone
here
I sat
die

Author's Note

Redid this someone pointed out that I'd made an error. I did write this in the early morning hours. Also silent isn't suppose to be underlined, but it won't underline so it's stuck there.

Reviews

[Michael X]

good, good work, i am a fan of the soft and dramatic emphasis on emotions,
it reminds me of the poet that dies unto one self to create or surrender
an emotion, or vision in the midst of an artistic moment, the image of earth
gives your worfds a vast sense of ponder, then to take the meaning
to its furthest depth where death holds reason, this is an excellent poem :)

[David W Moore III]

I see the confusion of everything scattered through our lives as we meander the craziness of life then as we grow older, we begin to hear the voice of earth, of nature, of our god, and camly return...

[wolfshrew]

I would love to hear the silent earth.

You can captivate with single words, I envy that.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

wow.....quick....there is a flow of this piece thqt once you start...you magically comes to a crashing end........great technique

[Gionelly Kiss]

I'm not quite sure what a wave waltz is but I enjoyed the interesting word choice and flow of this poem. I hope you did good in the contest.

[Helen Crutchett]

Krys this is great. I really loved how you used the 10 words in this waltz wave.
Thank you for submitting it to Tovli's contest!

Helena

[Raivenne]

Nuce use of the challenge form.

I think you've confused "silence" and "sense" as challenge words. You left out "earth" which is part of the challenge list (not "silence").