The Fall of Summer

The time of year when Summer gives way to Fall...

 

Foliage falling
 nature's calling
 Summer's closed her eyes.
 Tears streaming
 power's weaning
 Summer prepares goodbyes.


Gaining power
every hour
Fall rises from his sleep.
Never aging
forever waging
Both Fall and Summer weep.

 

Ever desiring
time transpiring
Summer can't hold Fall.
Tender lust
unspoken trust
passing moments enthrall.

 

Stolen breaths

uncertain deaths

their love never ending.

Stolen kiss

ageless bliss

one not both ascending.

 

Love dying

terror prying

their love not meant to be.

Hushed good byes

sincere sighs

to this they did agree.

 

Author's Note

I do believe that this piece is done! One of my best in a very long time. I actually like this one!

(Credit to the photographer)

Reviews

[Crow]

I liked it also! Made me think about how much I am ready for a change of season, thank you for revealing a small piece of you.

[David W Moore III]

It is a great piece. The rhyme scheme supports it well. And the romance between the seasons - sublime!

[SilentDreamer]

Love it! Great peice of writing in so many ways.

[Justin Tobey]

Great personification of the passing of one season and the renewal of another.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on this wonderful winning poem!

[Periac]

Love dying

terror prying

their love not meant to be.

Hushed good byes

sincere sighs

to this they did agree.

bit dark in a warm way...hard to place the feeling but thats why i love it

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is a surprise type poem you start with nature then subtlely personafiy the departing season and the new one replacing it. This is IMHO top-notch poetry thanks for sharing!

[E. A. Fielder]

I love it! I think the line that really opened up the imagry in my mind the most was "both fal and summer weep." I wouldn't call it a work in progress it seems finished to me. I love the picture you picked for it as well.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Well even as a work in progress this paints a nice picture of the changing season I will wait impaciently for the final version