Dreaming

Dreaming

A Poem by Destiny

I live in a world of dreams
Dreaming
Day and night

As I dream
The world becomes quiet
Less violent
More peaceful

As I dream 
Everything seems possible
Everything seems less terrifying
I live in a dream within a dream
I am considered an outsider 
Different from the others
I rather dream
Than to feel pain
Than to feel afraid
Than to feel anything at all

© 2012 Destiny


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TLK
"I live in a dream within a dream": slight hint of Inception there... sorry, couldn't help it.

"Than to feel anything at all", this is, of course, the line that makes it. And you know that because you put it at the end. I have to say I want to know MORE about the feelings that lead here. I want to know the tension between being considered different (for day-dreaming and dreaming continually, as if one is the other all the same) causing unpleasant feelings leading to a deeper entrenchment in the dream world.

If that's part of your aim then, job done for this poem. It will stay with me. However, I would also love it if you were to say more - in this poem or in a different one.

One radical outcome of dreaming too much is solipsism: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Solipsism
I hope you manage to avoid it, it's one the scariest things I can think of.

Posted 12 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Destiny

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much! You're comment was very helpful!



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TLK
"I live in a dream within a dream": slight hint of Inception there... sorry, couldn't help it.

"Than to feel anything at all", this is, of course, the line that makes it. And you know that because you put it at the end. I have to say I want to know MORE about the feelings that lead here. I want to know the tension between being considered different (for day-dreaming and dreaming continually, as if one is the other all the same) causing unpleasant feelings leading to a deeper entrenchment in the dream world.

If that's part of your aim then, job done for this poem. It will stay with me. However, I would also love it if you were to say more - in this poem or in a different one.

One radical outcome of dreaming too much is solipsism: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Solipsism
I hope you manage to avoid it, it's one the scariest things I can think of.

Posted 12 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Destiny

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much! You're comment was very helpful!
This is a nice piece, very concise. I rather like your concluding line. It really sums up the tone of the piece. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Destiny

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much!

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BRONX, NY



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