Hush Darling

Hush Darling,

Don't fall asleep.

It was brave to call it your own

every angle of a doll 

in many different ways.

Snow capped mountains

blushing at the rising dawn.

I plead guilty

but he never really won.

It doesn't really tear out a toy 

does it,

no posable legs or arms

no prize out of the box

no two inch gap to heaven.

We sweep the foundation

try to sleep ourselves to 

redemption.

Hush now Darling,

listen,

don't fall asleep.

Reviews

[Papaya]

There is something very haunting in these words.
Don't fall asleep. It might be considered a threat?
But this almost feels as though the speaker is talking to him or herself, comforting themselves wanting to avoid some bad dreams or memories that will come with sleep.

[Corset]

Thank you Anna, hard to explain, if there is even an explanation, so I'll just say thank you for commenting, it does seem to come off as spooky but i didn't realize till other mentioned, guess I'm getting a jump on Hallows eve :D

[Papaya]

Lol. :)
Sometimes our own frame of mind while reading influences our interpretations. Maybe that's a good thing. That it's multidimensional :)

[Corset]

:D hopefully just like what you said and not too scary lol.

[Paul Bell]

This is a very clever poem, gives out different connotations.
I'm thinking child abuse, maybe just because of the doll reference.
It has a ring to it, and as John says, spooky.

[Corset]

Thank you for stopping by Paul and for for comments, Halloween only a month away now

[Paul Bell]

What, it was only Halloween a month ago. This has been a strange year.

[Corset]

I flew by just like the last seven, we must be having fun :D

[Paul Bell]

I can see a lot of children being invented this year.

[Corset]

to invent a child takes a lot of love and twice as much imagination I imagine :D

[Paul Bell]

Not in lockdown, only takes minutes. Mind you, so does murdering spouses. lol

[Corset]

ah common now, you don't wanna do that who's gonna cook?

[Paul Bell]

Oh yeah, reverse that, I'll kill the neighbour instead.

[Corset]

There ya go, gotta think ahead about these things ya know. :D but then again...there goes the car pool ...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has such a 'spooky' tone to it. It seems the protagonist is warning about nightmares and guilt mixed as one sleeps. Reading still as it makes me think, ponder................................................

[Corset]

Thank you again john