Starlight Titan

a song I heard while dreaming made into a poem

You are my lost city of Atlantis

like a buried treasure beneath the sea

that I hoped one day would return to be

crashing up from below the dismal depths 

to ride the waves like a starlight Titan

to find the place were we first met,

Or from the fire, this is where I want to be;

anywhere there's you and me, this how it should be 

every time you look at me, I'm into the fire, 

when you're looking in my eyes 

this is when I'm hypnotized by the ire of the flame. 

You are the Van Gogh of my starry night

the billowing blow of the lambent light

the timeless end to an endless flight 

to the canvas night where we first met.

...but not by body, just by soul

when your arms are full of someone's glow

You are my lost city, my long lost name

and it begins to exact it's toll.

You were my lost city of Atlantis

like a buried treasure beneath the sea

that I hoped one day would return to be

crashing up from below the dismal depths 

to ride the waves like a starlight Titan.

...and from that fire, this Phoenix sprang

from that leviathan I tried to hang

not by body just by soul

entwined with the flame where we first met 

into the fire, into the dismal depth,

lost in the mystery of Atlantis.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What an extraordinarily powerful allegiance to past glories and a love that means more than dream, lyrics or poem can ever express. Yet you have, near dramatically created a poem so very personal and utterly sincere. Your classical references, for instance, ' You are the Van Gogh of my starry night - the billowing blow of the lambent light - the timeless end to an endless flight - to the canvas night where we first met.' - that is exquisite poetry. Will return to read again.. and again. Keep safe, always. .

[Corset]

Thank you Emma !

[emmajoy]

You're welcome, could have said more.. should have but..

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL you picked the same stanza:) I should of read your before...

[emmajoy]

Bunny: we have the same exquisite taste and am pretty sure Corset's so delighted, we've both been giveN an A.

[Corset]

yes, giddy with delight, thank you both :D

[emmajoy]

Now really laughing.. thank you.. probably the highest grade i've had for years!!!

[Corset]

A corresponding face for a corresponding emotion!
triple AAA's oh wait...

[emmajoy]

Laughing yet more.. it''s so wonderful to share fun.. especially when wanting sweet dreams. Thank you. :)

[Corset]

I'm afraid you lost me, but its always nice to see your smiling face.

[emmajoy]

On my way to sleep, is now 02.13 - still smiling..

[Corset]

ooooh I see, well hope you are sleeping well!

[emmajoy]

Promise, I was.. :)

[Tara]

Well hello there dear one! This masterpiece of yours makes me want to dance to flute spinning in joyful sorrowful reverie! So musical and so heartfelt. I have definitely missed your words and your spirit. It truly feels like a lifetime ago!

[Corset]

TARA! Yey! you are back now? Hello :D It feels like it because it was for say umm.. a seven year old, and you don't look a second older, me well young lady lets just say I look like someone packed some winter bags and left them under my eyes :D Life keeps on truckin' been riding any peace signs lately?

[Robert Trakofler]

wow I rarely dream a song maybe twice in my life this has happened. I have never had the gumption to transcribe a lyric into a poem they. for some reason... don't go together well for me? (I think maybe they come from different parts of my brain) I can't seem to make a poem into a song and vice versa:/ this is a lovely verse....
You are the Van Gogh of my starry night
the billowing blow of the lambent light
the timeless end to an endless flight
to the canvas night where we first met.

[Corset]

Thank you Robert that stanza seems to be the general consensus, i better check and make sure i haven't plagiarized something and all are just too nice to say so, egads.

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL I think that's all you:)

[Corset]

I did actually check, lol, and it is all me, but there were a bunch of first person mistakes and grammar issues, oh well. I got all my sentences right! woooooooo