Man and the Moon

What if Earth is actually heaven

and good souls became trees that provided

breath for the living grateful 

dancing , singing in the wind

pointing skyward or

their reward stolen from them to frown

up at us from the faces

 in our furniture

no longer

 pointing

s

u

n

w

a

r

d

(see that sun?  that's where you'll go!)

...and the sun is the burning pit

that churns bad souls for all eternity

where fuel for the fire spits hot flares

blinding the naked eye.

What if the moon was purgatory

where the "not quite pure"

would circle about

half lit, half unsure.

How many of us then

Will have been

the man

on the moon.

Reviews

[m.s.early]

well you plunged me outside of gravity and i'd be so unhappy and disillusioned if this were true. i am compelled to believe you've a wisdom of this and i'm afraid of what is left to learn from it.

[Corset]

Have you ever considered the night sky constantly in motion, swinging flinging the trillions of heavenly bodies, pock marked and barren, yet in all the billions of years our Earth has revolved, and is there not one of them big enough to knock us off our seat? If that is not evidence enough that we are orchestrated by something greater what is compelling enough to make one believe?

[W.k.kortas]

I generall abhor concrete poetry with a hatred that burns like the sun, but you've shown that it can be done effectively and correctly here. The piece carries the metaphor strongly from start to finish and the tone is impish when it should be, and wistful when that's the way to go. Well-built and thought-provoking work.

[An owl on the moon]

Moving and profound, your words transform the landscapes of the sky... and yes, what mystery awaits us when we ponder beyond our limited visions...

[Corset]

Thank you Craig

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well since I have been told many days I am the dark side of the moon ....then this is very accurate:) I am fire, so I guess the only logical between is Earth:) All silliness aside the is a very vivid and beautiful piece. Then again you are a very vivid and beautiful piece...of it ALL :) mwuah!

[Corset]

lol, Thank you Queenie

[Tree]

Another piece of yours that pulls out my imagination, and unfurls it. In a way this is more than a poem, it is almost a mini-philosophy. And another thing, there is no doubt where you will find my a*s; yes, the man on the moon.

really creative, C. Liked the format too.



Diego

[Corset]

lol, Thank you Diego, I imagine it's crowed there :)

[Corset]

crowded....Freudian?

[Tree]

lol yes Freud would contemplate.

It's packed. Like a big city DMV on a monday.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Now those are some very interesting thoughts to ponder, God is the almighty one so these things could be very true… in that case I hope to become a tree.

[Corset]

Thank you R&R but that might land you up as a table leg

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is true, but that just means I am support :)

[h d e rushin]

"A mix of ages would be best". Which was the answer given by Buzz Aldren when asked by a
facebook viewer "will it be better to send older or younger people to settle on Mars"?
"What if the moon was Purgatory"? What if the souls of those who die in Gods grace may
make satisfaction for past sins and so become fit for heaven by some "place" of temporary
suffering? Buzz as well as Roman Catholic doctrine ducks the question and thus pushes the
proud believer closer to faith (his or hers); that whatever heraldic color the here-after
might have, you best believe a poet painted it.

jacob said strong piece, and i agree.
dana.

i've been away attending (yes) another funeral. glad to be back. dana

[Corset]

Thank you Danna

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that analogy of the sun to hell, the moon to purgatory and how we would become trees if heaven is actually on earth...
and we grow towards the light, bathe in it, but are not burned by it.

strong piece.

[Corset]

I appreciate your kind words Jacob :)

[Susan Beth Horvath]

This is done with excellence and it gives the reader a very clear idea of what the writer dreams of! Easy flow and smooth rhythm-enjoyed reading.

[Corset]

Thank you Honey bee