The last three lines do it for me on this piece. I clicked on you at least partially because of your name -- wondering why you were censored ... glad I did.
' Some one squeezed out the clouds ~ like a wash woman's towel ~ and suddenly tears cling to the slick hot cheeks .. ' Can anyone better the idea of falling rain as tears.. ?!
You write pictures and paintings, you do! Read this twice, have a smile on my face because it was like walking though an open-air art exhibition! So many great lines, so many glints of how you see the comings and goings of colour bright moments and love and.. love.
It's Monday The perfect day to read this. Well knitted net of mystery.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Why is Monday the perfect day to read this? well, I have to say it came upon a midnight clear, I ju.. read moreWhy is Monday the perfect day to read this? well, I have to say it came upon a midnight clear, I just wrote it down.
oh, I see. Do you remember those old washing machines that used to draw the clothes between two roll.. read moreoh, I see. Do you remember those old washing machines that used to draw the clothes between two rolling pins and when you watched your grandma use it you thought she'd lose a hand between them, I was scared to death of that thing.
11 Years Ago
like it was yesterday. We graduated high school in 55.
i loved that opening image, clouds can be so poetic, the rain our tears, brilliant concept. the images here fall thick and fast, a great ending as well, nicely abstract. fantastic.
"Some one squeezed out the clouds like a wash woman's towel" Brilliant line! So descriptive! Unique and enchanting lines. May the mystery never end if it inspires this sort of poetry! Lydi**
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Lydi, I appreciate your visit, it's so nice to see you :)
This one blew my mind. I love the creativity in your words and approach. This had to have been fun to write because it was so much fun to read. Very cool.
Sami, helped a bit, showed me where the end lines should be, and where I should stop beating myself .. read moreSami, helped a bit, showed me where the end lines should be, and where I should stop beating myself self up. Thank you so much Jack for stopping in and liking this one.