The thing that kills

The thing that kills

A Poem by Corisica
"

What kills you? Don't let it in, not even for a moment.

"
Oh, it's a dreadful lot - the thing that kills.
A slimy, salamander beast of a thing! 
with barbs for eyes, it gives me chills,
The thing that kills. 
Spitting acid on the will of your dreams,
she'll coax you back with promise and sultry,
and all other things it seems.
But it'll be you who loses the sweetest of dreams.
And you'll be a sluggard before you know;
all that she promised will be unfulfilled,
and she'll be your greatest foe.
It's your choice, and you know. 
If you choose to let her in,
you'll be awarded years of pitiless sorrow.
You'll think of her now and then,
thinking of how you let her in.
You'll be thinking of the thing that kills,
and it won't ease your ages of waste.
You'll think of it when your heart finally stills;
the thing that kills.

© 2014 Corisica


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Lol ..it makes me chuckle along the side of feeling emotions. Nice poem, how beautifully you express the few things that kills in your poetic way! Lovely! It's simply and beautiful write, If I say. I'd look forward reading your stuffs!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This sounds like it's straight out a Tim Burton film and I love it, I think you have a real talent for not awkwardly putting together a rhyme and would like to see if this poem could be part of a larger story in your writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thomas Skahill

10 Years Ago

True, I could just see one of the characters singing this to be creepy so yea a ballad sounds wonder.. read more
Corisica

10 Years Ago

Oh I do like the folk-lore idea. It does seem like a song children would sing to keep out of trouble.. read more
Thomas Skahill

10 Years Ago

Hah, well don't procrastinate too much before furthering it! if you have time, I'd appreciate if you.. read more
"You'll be thinking of the thing that kills,

and it won't ease your ages of waste.

You'll think of it when your heart finally stills;

the thing that kills."

Thank you for sharing this good poem...:).....................

Posted 10 Years Ago


Corisica

10 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it! The last stanza kind of ends on a strong note, don't you think? That's what.. read more
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

I agree. You are welcome...:).................

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Added on February 17, 2014
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Tags: Poetry, Rhyme Scheme