A Silenced Fury

Because I'm fighting a losing battle,

And I'm racing behind the storms.

Confused and screaming helplessly,

I can't even win the war.

It's like I'm chasing all these nightmares,

Falling into an open dream.

My eyes are blinking rapidly,

It's not what I thought it'd seem.

I sensed I'd kiss your burning lips,

And avoid the acid stares.

Yet here I'm grousing lifelessly,

I'd wished I'd been aware.

I'll watch the falling rose,

Crash against your marble grave.

I'll peck your algid stone,

And slowly mock this failing save.

Author's Note

Tell me what ideas you get from this poem, and what YOU think it's about.

Reviews

[Marissa]

I think it might be about falling in love with someone and realizing that they weren't like you thought. I love the poem. I get this interesting picture from reading it; a lot of confusion and regret

[Secret Sunshine]

Thanks guys. That's really nice to hear!

[Greystone]

I think the person who's telling this story.... they don't know what's happening. They wanted something, they found it, and then realized it wasn't what they wanted at all because they weren't prepared for it. An artistic endeavour--growing up? Facing one's fears? Falling in love? Losing someone? Watching life go by without having the courage to do what she knows she can?

You are a miracle.

Keep being so.

[Ophelia Dragonheart]

Oh, I have to say, I like this very much! I don't think I could actually tell you what I think it's about (it gives me loads of very pretty ideas and thoughts, but a lot of them are abstract or images), but I can tell you what it REMINDS me of for sure. I have a character who is in a situation very similar to what this one seems to be.

On a technical note, this is gorgeous. I like the way it portrays the speaker's emotions, the fact that the regret and hopelessness are very out there for everyone to see at first glance, and yet when you pick it apart you have to dig a little deeper. All in all, a very gorgeous, inspiring, and speaking poem! Keep up the good work! ^.^