This Hole of Mine

This Hole of Mine

A Poem by Constant
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A short poem I wrote for the 'Unexplainable' writing contest. (211 words).

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The air grows warm

It is bright, children play

All are light, joyous and gay

I look inside, my bones exposed

I feel though I may have imposed

I’ve found a space, abandoned long

I think (although I may be wrong)

That something used to be in this hole of mine

 

The air grows cool

Leaves will fall, trees lie bare

School for all, and fresher air

Out I reach for something lost

Inside the hole grows cold as frost

This space of mine that I cannot see

Once held something belonging to me

Something that once filled this hole of mine

 

The air freezes cold

Many a tiding, coats are donned

The sun is hiding in hills beyond

All alone with this space of mine

I reflect on my life and path behind

I try my best to find a link

But even though all-night I think

I cannot remember what filled this hole of mine

 

The air thaws warm

Everywhere smiles, snow is leaving

And all the while my pain relieving

I have spent too many a year

Wondering why this hole is here

And all along I should have learned

I should have accepted that while I yearned

I may never find what fills this hole of mine

© 2016 Constant


Author's Note

Constant
Please critique! I haven't written any poetry since high school, and those works were hardly decent.

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I liked it, especially the last few verses which describe/question the wasted time focusing on hurt and pain. The way that the last few verses were worded really grabbed my attention. I don't know why but it made me think of Edgar Allen Poe for some reason. :O

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Constant

8 Years Ago

Well gosh I've never been compared to Poe before! Thank you so much!



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Really good poem ..... so vague yet so intriguing ..... all the way through found myself trying to conclude what the hole was actually referring to ... love how you ended without closure. Very good poem ... well worth the read

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have to really give you props! I loved it! I'm not really a poetry person but this really hit me in the feels! It's well written and not overly done. I like how you hooked me from the first couple of lines, yet made me hold my heart till the end. I literally almost cried, it's a beautiful poem with a lot of feeling behind it. Full rating.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Constant

8 Years Ago

Thank you! As I've told other commenters, I'm not much of a poet, but this piece just sort of lined .. read more
I liked it, especially the last few verses which describe/question the wasted time focusing on hurt and pain. The way that the last few verses were worded really grabbed my attention. I don't know why but it made me think of Edgar Allen Poe for some reason. :O

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Constant

8 Years Ago

Well gosh I've never been compared to Poe before! Thank you so much!
Really cool! I love the structure, how the beginning and end of each part are the same. You found a really strong way to finish without really giving an explanation, or rather you concluded it without finishing the story. Poetry isn't my favorite, but I thoroughly enjoyed this! Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Constant

8 Years Ago

Thank you! Myself, I don't generally write much poetry but this was an exception - glad you enjoyed!
So beautiful! I could definitely feel the meaning of your words. Bravo my friend, bravo :)
I must know, what inspired this wonderful poem?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Constant

8 Years Ago

If was initially spurred to try a short work of poetry when I saw the "Unexplainable" contest, which.. read more
A Humble Poet

8 Years Ago

Woah, I'll have to check that out, thanks!

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Tags: Emptiness, sad, tragic, rhyme, seasons

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Constant
Constant

The Windy Highlands, WY



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