Just Call Me.....Sunflower

Love lost....pleas to regain, misunderstanding, memories, obstacles to overcome

Just Call Me…..Sunflower

The red moon shines down upon him in specs

Low lonely filtered light he reflects

For he does not trust kindness, frowns

No delight

No trusting in love, no respect for his life

But there’s a trace of him in every word I write

In every thought I think

And he called me Sunflower

I was long and lean, shined tall and bright

 

Inside my brain thunder rattles and shakes

Like a speeding roaring freight train

Boiling steam releasing condensation

Restrained reverence is guiding me

Through channels of his bloody moon’s lost lonely dreams

 

I wish he could see me and know my words are true

But he turns his proud head away refuses to believe

I’m still his sunflower, full of life, swaying in the breeze

Seeking his touch, soft guiding hands around my keys

 

But there’s nothing I can do; plead for him to see

There are honest people in this world

There’s riot inside your mind that’s pleading for truth

To be released waiting wishing you will believe

 

It’s just a tiny plague of madness, mixed with a whole lot of greed

You feel contempt and indifference, but we’re mere mortal slaves

In inhumanity’s credo of the unrighteous indignities

The Lords of Medieval Fantasy whispered to me

They said just let go sweet girl and he’ll be free

But the bloody moon is rising, in his deep REM sleep

I feel a warm reflection like the hot desert’s heat

The righteous razor screams the cut’s too deep

 

But, just call me sunflower; I will turn my head

My soft petals with fall gently upon your chest

We will cuddle together forever at rest laying

Peacefully in our bed…..  

Author's Note

Appreciate input, thanks in advance for reading; just thoughts

Reviews

[Devons]

This is a really attractive piece of writing, and the language is compelling.
It's interesting how it achieves the portrayal of a character by contrast: showing the soft beauty and understanding tolerance of the narrator reflecting the harsh cynicism of the lover by comparison. There's a cleverness in the way that works: indirectness is often a more effective form of communication when combined with intelligence, and is often far more readable than the opposite (which is closer to being didactic).
The overriding message the poem skilfully conveys though is the crux of its appeal: the co-existence of opposites; the 'yin and yang', beauty and the beast, rough and smooth human identity. It is like a mutual thriving based on the qualities of one another, and the sympathy and empathy shared in what the other does not possess. Often people dismiss the possibility of such a relationship of personalities and souls on paper, but in reality it happens all the time - and in fact it is the mediating quality of human survival and understanding.
Really well written; intelligently, sympathetically poised with winning balance.

NB "...mixed with (a) whole lot of greed" --- and shouldn't the third last line read: "my soft petals will fall gently upon your chest"..?

[Confuser]

Devons: Odd, but then again; I corrected that....maybe I didn't save; so sweet to bring it to my attention. I'm reading your review thinking, I totally agree: now let me check out this poem he's referring to....LOL....thanks!!!

[Devons]

Oh, I am a microscope!!

[Confuser]

I am going to restrain: Sorry, I bet you would have loved microbiology, physiology, anatomy and above all the labs.........................Guten Tag! Too smart Devons, your use of language is powerful!.......thanks again....

[Devons]

Actually, I hated science at school! ;)
Although there are certain parts of anatomy I find fascinating... I'll shut up now .

[Confuser]

Gotcha: but I love science and especially chemistry, and every one I mentioned; have a great day!

[Michael G. Smith]

Wow, what serendipitous ride! Mind, body and soul exhausted. You have much going on within you and an ease at it expression. Your poetry is the electric that runs through the battend and cables hooked up to this mind. Sizzle!

[SmittyJas]

This is truthful and direct sun light bleach white tale of a poem bring it on home he will get the point and never again stray from home Just Call me SunFlower I will turn my head. Prefect lines of poetry.

[Michelle Gent]

Beautiful, intense, great imagery.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Dale... "like a speeding roaring freight train"
describes the thunder in our brain". I finally
returned to your beautiful poetry.
I have four grandchildren... and still
I need poetry to keep my path filled
with passion and devotion... always
hoping that my best gift to my
children and grandchildren will be
a sense of propriety. When I read
"Just call me sunflower"... I am
held in rapture the emotion you
portray... like a Portrait of
someone who cannot trust,
and yet, is sweet and charming
to the core. We are blessed with
tall sunflowers in our neighborhood.
The owners seem to be pillars of
strength in our neighborhood.
I am in awe of your gift of
poetry, and hope to read more.
truly, Pat

[sonnie ibadah]

so dreamy....i like it

[Sami Khalil]

The sunflower needs those rays of the sun and their warmth as marriages do. What a great analogy compared with marriage and its fragility or strength. At least the sunflower turns toward the sun looking for that distant hope. Excellent my friend...:)....................

[Ovi-Odiete]

The above poem is deep and emotional.. ..
Nice.

[Iris]

This is really good. It's much more than just thoughts.

[Terrence Chang]

Great write miss sunflower.
However there is one line that i feel it is incomplete. So here is my thought in it
"No delight as he wore no crown"

[Confuser]

Chang: I love it! You are so smart...can't change it now, but wrote it down & WILL for SURE!!! BTW, the other suggestion you gave: if you have time suggest to Saddam...I hope you know, I don't care...since it was pairing....Thank you. Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Your welcome Dale

[Confuser]

THANK YOU!!!!! I ALWAY LOVE TO HEAR FROM YOU...

[Terrence Chang]

Same here Dale

[Confuser]

I hope when I go to your site you have something for me to read:D