Carried Away......

 Carried Away….

A soul felt by a wind,

So light like a breath,

Invisible but endearing,

Like a soft caress shocking the senses,

Such an intriguing power pulled it higher into the outer atmosphere.

An articulate Southeastern draw captured it; taken away so far so high, like a magnetic ring.

 

Below valleys, deserts, oceans and shores

Out-line the boundaries but just convection

Forming brilliant colors, odorless, a curious nothingness persists.

Nature’s connection is no longer perplexing.   

Indifference prevails:  no pleading or confusion, wishes or illusions.

No haughty thirst for answers.

The treasure trove of anticipation evaporated in a nanosecond like the ghost visualized in the cloudy layers of familiar affability somewhere between the days and nights,

Infinitely forever altered within this realm.

 

An angel sealed within the universe voiced infinite tones emphatically silent, deafening, devouring and undefeated.

How can this be a reality? Only instinct exists in between the brilliance of light realizing the magnificence of life.

The Virtuous sounds seem so pure and overpowering; filtered away in the universe.

Ecstasy’s revelation is minuscule in comparison.

 

The vast distance immense and profound between this cosmic elation that rises with the wind.

A continuous flight effortlessly divided by planes of existence and time dividing

Like cells to maintain autonomy and once assured freedoms.

No yesterdays or tomorrows, no worries or sorrows….

 

Captured inside and out, whatever comfort encompasses the spirit;

No longer mystified,

Abrogating this privilege; Realizing a precious freedom, given unsuspectingly; a prayer for the universe,

God give this warmth and affection to them for who am I?

 But desire’s stirring cordiality calls tenderly.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

This is a stunningly handsome write. I had no problem at all understanding the depth of your poem but, I will tell you this. I could not have written that. You have a gift of imaginative thought that can put a poem like that together. I simply do not. You have a special talent. I do not know how long it took you to write and be satisfied with that poem but, it was worth the time. I am a different kind of a writer, I think. I get a thought , a phrase, a combination of words, anything in my head and I go and Voila, I have a poem. My talent I think comes through in my skill at editing my own work. I am most impressed by you!

[Confuser]

Perkele.7885: The more time, most of the time for me; the worst results. I have NO idea, other than an angel poet that guides me. This probably took all of 45 minutes, if that. I cannot force writing. Someone said don't think; I guess not using much of my brain helps: HA!! Thank you so very much for the wonderful review. I cannot wait to read your work! Dale

[Indra Neil]

wow! vivid and stunning imagery in this riveting write! bravo! *claps*

[SuspectGray]

My first thought was that the soul conceives the universe as it is and revels in that existence unabated by the false realities of human-kind. I also think you have enough ideas in this poem for 2 or 3 more ( : O )

[Sami Khalil]

"Ecstasy’s revelation is minuscule in comparison.

The vast distance immense and profound "

[nazia]

The only thing I would say Dale is I got CARRIED AWAY. The scenes, the imagery, the description is just spell bounding.
Loved it :)

[Confuser]

Nazia: I am but a novice at poetry: I so appreciate your comments; people have been so nice & encouraging...I think I like it too; I know others do and that's just amazing to ME!!!

[nazia]

Its all your work Dale. Be confident with that. :)
As for people on the site, we all are here to help and encourage each other,. That's how a community grows

[Confuser]

Nazia: well put, but I am truly shocked by all the wonderful, generously kind people & the encouragement...it's unreal...I thank you sooooooooooo very much.

[nazia]

You're welcome :)

[Confuser]

Thank you:}

[ANTO]

This is a beautiful creation Dale. A tremendous journey studded with so many ethereal images and truly wonderful phrasings. If I died I would wish that this is the way my final moments would be experienced. Really gorgeous.
Its poetry in HD is what it is. Thank you for posting this.

[~]

WOW this is a very powerful write. A rich and lush imagery dancing in the mind of the reader, whispering peaceful tones and radiating the warmth of your spirit.

[Lydia Shutter]

There is a beautiful spirituality to the imagery you employ here. Your choice of vocabulary is stunning. "somewhere between the days and nights" that is where we all live, is it not? Inspirational poetry....very good. Lydi**

[dan]

Dale, This absorbing piece reads like a philosopher postulating a theory so complex that one almost feels awestruck reading it. You say that you're new to poetry? If so, you're certainly learning quickly! To do a justifiably full review of this poem would have me writing 5 times more words than are in the poem, at least. Often times thoughts so complex are difficult to put into words. The fact that you've done so is commendable. Now I'm going to read another. Very interesting and accomplished writing, sir/ma'am. take care...dan

[backwords]

Reading this put me in a state only felt as a child. Looking up at the clouds... Or out the window of a car, on a long drive. Just drifting away.... Just being... Very good! I enjoyed every word!~