Love Winks

love, nature, relationships, anticipation, changes, rituals; whatever you think

Love Winks

Every morning I walk the edge of the woods,

The rising shining sun winks at me passing behind trees,

We play our game as a ritual or a prayer,

We love our hellos and goodbyes,

Awaiting morning’s glaring flares,

Love is everywhere and nowhere.

 

Playing hide and seek,

I will find you, will you blink a wink?

 

I have become an insomniac, anticipating attention,

but like a train,

I can change my tracks.

To find you wherever you may go,

The roaring whistle of love loudly blows.

Author's Note

Just wrote this morning as I walked with my dog by the forest behind our home. Any suggestions are always welcome. Hope it's alright! Thank you for reading, I so appreciate it. Special thanks to Ana Sophia, she looked it over, gave me the courage to post it. Thanks.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Loved this one to.
Your rhyming is so great, it seems like it comes naturally doesn't feel forced, which is great.
This seems pretty romantic again, I love a bit of romance :)
but like a TRAIN,
I can change my tracks.
Really liked that part fr some reason, just thought it was cleaver.
Great write :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wonderful appreciation of nature and love that is felt in this great experience. Beautiful imagery to accompany the magic...:)..................

[Aprille]

This is great actually, the imagery is captivating and soothing. I am missing morning walks at the woods back home... And love really can be everywhere and nowhere. :)

[Terrence Chang]

WOW!!! fantastic piece you have written. I am glad Ana has encouraged you to post this one

[W R Stowe]

Very creative piece of how lovers often play game like this very nicely written

[Angad Waraich]

Very nice imagery. Good flow. A nice piece to write in the morning it captures the fresh state of mind.
Well done.

Thank you.
Angad

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Loved it ! Loved it ! Loved it! perfection everywhere beautiful lines ..OMG now this one is going to my favorite shelf !!!!!!!!
" but like a TRAIN,
I can change my tracks.
To find you wherever you may go,"
thumbs up ! ;)

[anne]

I have become an INSOMNIAC, anticipating attention,
but like a TRAIN,
I can change my tracks.
To find you wherever you may go,
The roaring whistle of love loudly blows........
such a nice piece of poetry...:))

[Lizardo]

This is a wonderful piece of poetry!
I love the imagination on this one
But by far my favorite line of all is this noe:
''but like a TRAIN,
I can change my tracks.''
Excellente piece of poetry

[R Smith]

just amazing Dale, you should have the greatest confidence in your abilities because you are a fantastic poet :)

[Confuser]

You know you are my favorite poet, talent galore!! Thank you so much. Got to thank Ana S on notes: she gave me confidence to post it. Was just walking like always, jotted it down. Voila, not ad.

[R Smith]

to be your favourite is a genuinely true honour

[Confuser]

Oh, I blab to everyone; I mean it! And thank you but you did it and you are a true gentleman, intelligent, and I love that sense of humour. When I came here you & Momzilla were so kind to me, and I will never forget, without that, I probably would have quit.

[R Smith]

your far to good to ever quit, you write great poems :)

[Confuser]

God willing Richard, I will do my best. So much to learn here.

[WEIGHWITHWORDS]

this is sweet...whoever the special someone is...is blessed to have you write such a poem. I liked it!

[Confuser]

Just the forest, I've written, White Wolf and Tender Hearts, love poetry, I'm terrible at it! This was 5 minutes this am. I emailed it to Ana Sophia, was so uncertain. But thank you, I'll be reading yours soon. Thank you!!!!

[Confuser]

But weightwithwords, your interpretation sounds good too. I just re-read it, it could go that way too, humm, didn't even recognize it. Wow.