Tender Hearts

I feel like a first grader when it comes to writing about the heart, so feel free to slam me;

Tender Hearts

 

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A tiny tender heart pure and white,

So innocent and giving like dawn’s morning light

Every morning and late twilights twinkle

Lit up the world with smiles colored

like rainbows never-ending.

 

Flowers look upon her and gleam,

Prances ‘round daisys' and butterfly's wings,

Innocuous, intoxicating, exhilarating delight,

No one could compare to her parlor of dreams.

 

Amorous thief stole her bright shine,

Wiped his shiny shoes and said adieu,

Tears fell fast upon the earth and landslide

Took him asunder the hot burning earth,

 

Satan grinned for he excelled at his craft,

He asked why I am here, what did I do,

You split apart her heart and took her virtue,

Now she wears a veil, like you used to,

 

But she will dance again, unlike you.

The fires of love grows stronger every

Dawn and lights up the meadows with

Lilies that spawn laughter around the land,

 

You left her with blessings, and that I cannot stand!

So you will burn forever, searching for someone,

In the ashes of my darkness, I will give you my son,

Your filthy skin will melt like snow, for all eternity.

 

 So think twice young men, before you make a vow,

They are meant to be kept, so think carefully now.

Author's Note

Thanks to Ana, Will and Emily for help with my grammatical errors! Big Ooops! Will try to look much more carefully!

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

ohh my!! Recently i was in dilemma whether to call my ex and wish him a new year... but now you have convinced me that i need to let him rot in hell for all i care!!
Talking seriously i like your power to weave such a lovely tale with a power of parable in it.. It gives the reader a delight . not only is the theme innocent but the style and usage of delicate phrases emphasize rhe purity. The flowers the fields the country setting give us a peaceful feeling.But the entry of Satan-Boom!! Makes the readers ready for a scary s**t! But it takes a turn and makes the devil pay.Thats really cool. :) i am happy i read you. *takecare*

~Sophy

[Confuser]

Sophy, it is for us to be kind; maybe not a good idea to call; but I wish you and everyone, happiness and peace. Thank you for reading; did this so quickly; you are a very good writer.

[Sophy Freebirds]

:-) i am humbled. thank you so much.Was a pleasure reading

[Confuser]

You are so kind. Thank you.

[Angad Waraich]

Well, this is one hell of a piece to read as soon as you come back to the site after such a long time. YOu just made me miss being here even more.

Brilliant writing ma'am.

Thank you for sharing.
Angad

[Confuser]

Thank you so much! How very kind Angad and welcome back.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you. ;)

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you. :)

[Confuser]

Y/W..............Y/W

[Jimmy Yetts]

You convinced me, C. Gonna give my ex a call, right now--although, come to think of it, I don't know how much good that would do; she left me.
In any event, I enjoyed your poetic morality tale--and I'll try to be a good boy, from now on.
If I'm not, I know there'll be the devil to pay.

[Lizardo]

Beautiful writing, that's all there is to say, because I love this poem.

[Cool Girl]

Nice imagery:) I liked this a lot!

[MomzillaNC]

Great imagery and provocative theme. I liked this one very much.

[harshita]

So think twice young men, before you make a vow,
They are meant to be kept, so think carefully now.
one of my favourite lines..... :)
thanks for sharing :)

[Confuser]

Hope you publish some more writing; I would love to read! Thank you so much harshita.

[harshita]

yeah sure i would :) thanks :)

[anne]

I liked everything about it...flow in many layers..so well structured...:))

[Matching Socks]

Love the ending, just wrapped it up perfectly.
Always think about the consequences of your actions!

[ANTO]

This is cool Dale. A tale with a sting. Very clever. The final lines slam like a casket lid - class!!
:))