Fall

I hope you get a laugh or at least smile

 

Fall

A man once promised

He would love me forever,

Yet he lied, he cheated.

No never! Never! I said.

I must have tripped and 

Fallen back gain' in his bed.

Snoring like lazy mules,

Awakening by his head,

But his body is absent?

O'suppose, I'll get that same tale,

Riding his steed through town,

Helping poor womenfolk in need.

 

 

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

Very witty indeed. Has a bittersweet Ichabod crane feel to it - feeling for his poor wife but laughing at the scenes you painted
Good one

[Confuser]

Thank you, just something silly; of course it was based o Ichabod, but if I put that in the notes, it would ruin the hopeful possibility of a smile at the ending. No? Thanks again.

[armin]

very well and creatively written Dale. I had a fun time reading it.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

funny and frightening at the same time.



I must have tripped and

Fallen back gain' in his bed.

Snoring like lazy mules,

Awakening by his head,


thank you for your kind review
and comments.


God bless. Benita
But his body is absent?

[A Ghost of Myself]

Fallen back gain' in his bed. (‘gain). This was good for a chuckle, thank you. I imagine her riding off on his steed would be a symbol to all those that new him.

[Fran Marie]

Oh my...well he's Lucky that his head was the only thing you chopped off..I heard of worse..funny write...

[Kami Grace]

It really made me giggle when I saw the line "But where is his body?".
A light yet delighting poem, bravo! :)

[willweb]

That's what I call losing your head over love (for someone else?) Riding off into the night cheating, well I guess he got what he deserved. This was funny Dale.

[R Smith]

Hi Dale, it was definitely worth a laugh in the second stanza and then became ghostly, did you chop off his head and he became the headless horseman, that makes it hilarious, well written as usual :)

[Confuser]

Wow, Richard, was unhappy w/my writing so I typed in this silly thing, but, I suppose it could be carried on...Maybe I did create the Headless Horseman that cheats, woman and death. Thank you so much.

[R Smith]

creative is the right word for you, its in your blood just need to believe it yourself :)

[Confuser]

Thanks for the encouragement. Need to work more about proper ways to write. Began reading about sonnets this am. Interesting.

[R Smith]

your right it is all very interesting i should do the same and find out what it is i'm doing, i just write and wait till someone tells me i made a mistake :)