Three Day Storm

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Three Day Storm

 

Searching for peace

Beneath the catacombs,

Below those horrid tunnels,

The spirits call their homes,

 

Constant interference,

Filters aborted, static consistent,

Will not leave her alone,

Release of energy

Thwarted,

 

Isolation overwhelming,

Seeking perfect balance,

A revelation, in the distance,

O’ what a tool!

 Hopeless desperation,

Uncovers a solitary fool,

 

Vibrations of winds,

Resonance in design,

Impact her stability,

Alert impending failure,

 Quickly to arrive.

 

Sails of a ship lowered,

Breezes on a small face,

No separation of space,

 

Flags of many colors

 Wave to say hello,

Saluting the mainland,

Only a tempered distraction,

 

Clear waters light the way,

The colorful coral guide

Wisdoms’ silent haze

Echoing words of disgrace,

 

She opens the doorway,

Kneels down and prays.

Retribution slowly dissipates.

Recovery of peace,

she waits.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Such beauty and grace you show your pen. For its a heaven send. Rivers deep oceans wide in this poem you have nothing to hide. I love the glide of your pen making good sense along the way. Peace and Prayer roll in off the oceans winds. Lovely write Great performance indeed.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

When I read this, I'm feeling sad, there's a overwhelming feeling of loneliness in this poem. But still in the last line where she will wait, there is hope. Very fluently rhythm, good imagery and metaphor. Liked it, Dale. :)

Rudi

[Sami Khalil]

We pray for peace. We salute the motherland. We honor the victims. Excellent...:).................

[Confuser]

Thank you for seeing through my words. Wow, a review blew my mind. But inspired a mightly, angry poem, so there. Let me read your words that so eloquently flow. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)........................

[Confuser]

Glad you are here. Went back to a poem, inspired by your prose, and the descriptions - I'm not happy, but I'm certainly getting there.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:)..............

[Confuser]

...............................................................Dale

[Sami Khalil]

:):::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::Sam

[Confuser]

Darn this!...............................................D:

[Laura Lynn]

oh gee the catacombs, maybe I will go to the local grotto near hear, someday I'm going to visit it, though I don't know when to go there and I know God is here as well in this living room, why is she waiting on the ocean for the flags of many colors, are those all the colors of all the countries or the names of the ships? Well, I like this quest for balance and I hate waiting, it is so dreadful yet necessary at times and what do we do while we are waiting? oh gee, I like it. In the composition do you have a certain number of syllables per line? Prayer seems to be the key here, a way to embark to solve to come to good things to bring them to fruition

[wordman]

the theme of this write covers a lot of ground,it flowed effertlessly

[R Smith]

Hi Dale, this one reminds me of a style of writing i sometimes use where i let the words flow without stopping to draw breath, then see what comes out, i guess you did not do this it just makes me think of a style i really enjoy doing but enough of me, sorry bout that, your poem reflects on the dreams and imaginings of a mind trapped at home for days on end by the heavy rain, hence the references to waves and water, its a great poem and you have to be very proud of it :)

[Chandler bing]

Dude your name confuser totally undersells the way you describe :)