Three Day Storm

Tell me what you think.

Three Day Storm

 

Searching for peace

Beneath the catacombs,

Below those horrid tunnels,

The spirits call their homes,

 

Constant interference,

Filters aborted, static consistent,

Will not leave her alone,

Release of energy

Thwarted,

 

Isolation overwhelming,

Seeking perfect balance,

A revelation, in the distance,

O’ what a tool!

 Hopeless desperation,

Uncovers a solitary fool,

 

Vibrations of winds,

Resonance in design,

Impact her stability,

Alert impending failure,

 Quickly to arrive.

 

Sails of a ship lowered,

Breezes on a small face,

No separation of space,

 

Flags of many colors

 Wave to say hello,

Saluting the mainland,

Only a tempered distraction,

 

Clear waters light the way,

The colorful coral guide

Wisdoms’ silent haze

Echoing words of disgrace,

 

She opens the doorway,

Kneels down and prays.

Retribution slowly dissipates.

Recovery of peace,

she waits.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Such beauty and grace you show your pen. For its a heaven send. Rivers deep oceans wide in this poem you have nothing to hide. I love the glide of your pen making good sense along the way. Peace and Prayer roll in off the oceans winds. Lovely write Great performance indeed.

[armin]

nice flow there in the poem Dale. Very intense and overwhelming write with good metaphors.
Three days storm.
Well titled.
Thanks for sharing.

[Sanjh]

It's beautiful Dale. Flowing smoothely from darkness to hope. Your poem represents how we feel when something devastating happens in our life and leaves us defeated. But there's some hope in our heart that the storm is followed by a bright shiny day.
thank you for sharing...:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Amazing poetry!
i think Richard's interpretation is perfect!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[Jamsheed Shafi]

nice write friend.
flow is good.

[willweb]

This was an adventure Dale. The storm was intense and the disgrace overwhelming. I like the feel of this and how it flowed.

[MomzillaNC]

There's a lonely life-tossed feeling to this piece. Well penned.

[Angad Waraich]

This is a really nice write. It has a nice flow and rhythm to it. Very well penned.

Well done and thank you for sharing.
Angad

[icelandicblue]

I felt a journey through heartache toward redemption. You say in your poem "perfect balance" that is what we all aspire to if we are self aware at all.

[Matching Socks]

This piece has so many layers and really fuels many feelings.
It has a very fast pace which matches the storm but it all comes together in the end to delivery us from the storm to a hope for peace.

[Kami Grace]

The great contrast between the beginning and ending of the poem amazes me. At the start, the picturesque words brought me shivers of loneliness, while the last stanza created peace. Rhythm flows smoothly from line to line. Nicely penned! :)