Monkey Mind

This took all of 2 minutes and probably reads that way, but I cleared my mind; actually, I wrote this as a review, the first day I joined. It is my Second Poem. Anyway. Thanks.

Am I human, yes I am,
But why all this worry swirling around?
Why can’t I make it stop;
it’s like a crazy train you see
It’s rolling down the tracks so fast,
I can’t get off

Stop my brain, it’s destroying me!

Do I have a monkey mind?
Help me see am I a clown?
I fear so much,
It’s killing me.
Why all these anxieties?

My mind is like a rocket
I can’t stop it!
It goes awry
And I fly
To the end of the earth
Without stopping.

Every second of every day
I wish for fear to go away.

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

I wanted to review you but wanted to read what you 'used to write like' as you are honest about your work.
This piece has emotion and indeed is raw. BUT, I believe a good poet can mask that rawness through various tools granted to us by Literature. All I mean is a revision.
The allusion to a monkey mind is an intriguing one.. It is a good piece...and I wish it to develop its previously unknown qualities.
Let me know if you make the decision, I'd love to read it.

[Confuser]

Thank you. I'll have to work on it, probably quite a bit. It is apparent my new poem simply is terrible. But I love the way you don't write a review, it is encouraging. Thank you for your time.

[Stonz P.]

Ma'am, nowhere in the review have I mentioned your afore said adjectives for your poetry. If it were not to my liking I'd not read it all; avoids having to be superficial.
Your writes are full of emotion and in my view, that is what counts.
But aren't we poets? Anyone can trivially scribble but can all truly express? NO!
Have faith in your writing if you believe it's good, else keep working on it till your heart is content with it.
Trust me, there's no better feeling to a poet than that :)

[Confuser]

Actually, I do trust your opinion. And, it is very, very difficult for me to trust. You poetry is phenomenal. Thank you for your time.

[Laura Lynn]

I never heard of a monkey mind, nice 'coining'...I like this feeling of the mind jumping from tree to tree swinging like a monkey, the wonderful thing about those creatures.

[R Smith]

a strong poem about fear and its true that this is one of our emotions that spreads like fire, your line of the mind like a rocket says it all, time to hold up, hit the brakes, breathe and cool those nerves, meditate the fear away, an excellent poem from you 'Confuser' very well done :)

[norafb]

oh,good god,it's great! Maybe you should work a little to deepen the emotions but i LOVE it. And I'm impressed how good voice you created. I can hear it accelerate as the song goes on. Nice job :)