Monkey Mind

This took all of 2 minutes and probably reads that way, but I cleared my mind; actually, I wrote this as a review, the first day I joined. It is my Second Poem. Anyway. Thanks.

Am I human, yes I am,
But why all this worry swirling around?
Why can’t I make it stop;
it’s like a crazy train you see
It’s rolling down the tracks so fast,
I can’t get off

Stop my brain, it’s destroying me!

Do I have a monkey mind?
Help me see am I a clown?
I fear so much,
It’s killing me.
Why all these anxieties?

My mind is like a rocket
I can’t stop it!
It goes awry
And I fly
To the end of the earth
Without stopping.

Every second of every day
I wish for fear to go away.

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

I wanted to review you but wanted to read what you 'used to write like' as you are honest about your work.
This piece has emotion and indeed is raw. BUT, I believe a good poet can mask that rawness through various tools granted to us by Literature. All I mean is a revision.
The allusion to a monkey mind is an intriguing one.. It is a good piece...and I wish it to develop its previously unknown qualities.
Let me know if you make the decision, I'd love to read it.

[Confuser]

Thank you. I'll have to work on it, probably quite a bit. It is apparent my new poem simply is terrible. But I love the way you don't write a review, it is encouraging. Thank you for your time.

[Stonz P.]

Ma'am, nowhere in the review have I mentioned your afore said adjectives for your poetry. If it were not to my liking I'd not read it all; avoids having to be superficial.
Your writes are full of emotion and in my view, that is what counts.
But aren't we poets? Anyone can trivially scribble but can all truly express? NO!
Have faith in your writing if you believe it's good, else keep working on it till your heart is content with it.
Trust me, there's no better feeling to a poet than that :)

[Confuser]

Actually, I do trust your opinion. And, it is very, very difficult for me to trust. You poetry is phenomenal. Thank you for your time.

[lovelife]

Very raw, stress and mental ilness not a lot of people talk about it thanks

[Workvio]

A very good assessment of the world we live in, and what it is doing to us as people. Technology and Mental Illness seem to be developing by leaps and bounds the world over, most especially in these United States. Even those who escape the fate of Mental Illness find that they are mentally anxious, their minds full of worries and frets as to all that is going on this world around us ... Mankind is not evolving ... Mankind is DE-volving ...

This bit of babbling shared, I feel every word of every line you have written ... My mother gave me a gift that her family and father passed on to her ... Manic Depression ... In today's technologically psychological jargon and lingo ... Bi-Polar Disorder ... One of the symptoms of this mental disorder is that of having endless, ceaseless, thoughts running around in your head night and day incessantly ... They call these kind of bothersome and worrisome thoughts, Racing Thoughts ...

I would never imply that you are mentally ill, but I will share that I am, like it or not, and have long sense stopped calling my affliction a curse, but simply a condition I must deal with in attempting to transform it into a positive gift, rather than a negative curse ...

Your poem has a lot to say to a lot of people who need to know they are not alone in dealing with these kinds of thought related problems ...

Your heart has penned to page a very insightful, honest, and informative poem ... Good job, and thank you so much for sharing your heart ...

Marv

[SmittyJas]

Very well written Poem and fear is powerful thing to take over ones mind it and control your strength and weaknesses

[Chris]

Thoughts aren't about the time to capture or have... just to live them. You touched upon an elemental law of existence - our fears - very well.

[nafisa]

so fierce, so strong. I could relate its beautiful, what you brought to my mind, so beautiful.
Well done!

[periwinkle]

Wow this poem just hit me! It's wonderful. This reminds of my messed up mind :D

[Confuser]

Periwinkle, you're mind is NOT messed up! I am going to read one of your poems. Anxiety is normal; millions of people have anxiety disorders. You look young, so give yourself a break. Thank you.

[priya]

its so nicely expressed ..really charming.. :)

[M.A.Rathore]

Very nice poem really .It it full of vibrent feelings to do more than decided.

Am I human, yes I am,
But why all this worry swirling around?
Why can’t I make it stop; it’s like a crazy train you see
It’s rolling down the tracks so fast, I can’t get off
Stop my brain, it’s destroying me.

Anxious mind thinks more tricks to solve the crezy feelings that come across.You have drawn the picture very vividly . How the fast the manner you think on matters like fast moving train is enjoyable.


Do I have a monkey mind?
Help me see am I a clown?
I fear so much,
It’s killing me.
Why all these anxieties?

Though you seem to be puzzled yet so many nice ideas are coming through your mind and that's creativity is going without question.

My mind is like a rocket
I can’t stop it!
It goes awry
And I fly
To the end of the earth
Without stopping.

These are the best comparion of your mind being the fastest moving rocket..thinking and thinking.

Every second of every day
I wish for fear to go away.

And you want this tension may retire and leave you in calmness of heart and mind as well.
I really enjoy your poem . Hope all is fine. Please do some of my poetry and express your views regarding. Thanks .Kwep writing....
-M.A.Rathore

[Confuser]

Mr. Rathore, thank you. The first poem I read was from a teenager named Justin. I wrote this as a response and very quickly w/o really thinking so I do feel encouraged and appreciate it. I will read your writings. Thank you.

[M.A.Rathore]

Thank but keep writing ..I t will polish your life and attitude altogether.. Have a nice time!

[Arshia]

The mind with all its anxieties indeed appear to be a monkey mind at times! Very apt reference..well written :)

[Kitalia Emme]

The confusion that is life, and the struggle to learn to let go and relax. A lesson we all need.
You are clear, consistent, and extremely creative. I love the light reference to the circus theme. Great job! I look forward to seeing many more of your works.