Violent Nature

My love will never be gentle

Not after the s**t I’ve endured

My love will never be simple

I’m poisoned, jaded, and impure

 

I’m a new man; a new fiend

I’m deranged now and unclean

I’m unholy and obscene

I’m tortured; never serene

Come find me if you want me

But beware

Hear the warning

I’m built to hate; bred for hurting

 

There’s a longing for your touch and to bring you to your knees

My self loathing grows contagious and I’ll pass on the disease

Although I ache to love you, my tries are bound to fail

The demon deep within is the force that shall prevail

I prayed to God for solace, but He doesn’t hear my cries

The madness that becomes me only grows and multiplies

Though I’ve told you what I wanted my wishes have been doomed

And the only urge I have is to leave you with a wound

Reviews

[Emily B]

i may have been involved with you a time or two, the modus operandi sounds familiar anyway

[Commanda Panda]

I've had other profiles that I used years ago. But I do not retain memories of the past unless they linger and haunt me.

[Emily B]

lol

i wasn't meaning online accounts, it seems to me that i have loved that man you describe, his reflection in the mirror was probably different

[Commanda Panda]

My dear, is that a subtle attempt at a flirtation? lol

[Emily B]

do you know the story about the old lady that lived in a shoe?

that is me

[Commanda Panda]

she had so many kids she didn't know what to do.

[Emily B]

my holly hobby lifestyle is known far and wide

[Commanda Panda]

You lost me.

[Emily B]

old joke, i wander a little late at night, you could say i have foolish ways

[Commanda Panda]

Sometimes foolishness keeps us from getting too old too fast.

[Emily B]

oh i hope so

[Commanda Panda]

Ah, but it's much better when you have others to be fools with you.

[Emily B]

we'll get along real good :)

[Commanda Panda]

Maybe on my good days. ;)

[Emily B]

ahhhh, adventure

[ChaoticSoul]

I like the rhyme scheme you incorporate here, it gives the poem a melodic and lyrical tone. I also like the conflict and contradictions you convey through this piece. It is very representative of daily life.