Superficial
A Poem by Commanda Panda
My enemies are android
My friendships are QWERTY
The world is binary
But my thoughts are thirty
I’m dirty, not sterile
And this is to my peril
The world is against me
So I must be feral
Paranoid? No sir
I’m clear in my perception
I could look into your eyes
And never see reflection
Evolution is real
But you were never worthy
You’ve read me repeatedly
But have you really heard me?
© 2013 Commanda Panda
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good read and write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks for stopping by.
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The world is against me so I must be feral. WOW. I could go off on a happy little tangent on that one phrase right there, but you don't know me so there is still time for me to hope that I don't revolt you at first glance. I'll refrain. But its a powerful statement and now its going to churn in my head for the rest of the day. Evolution is real but you were never worthy. Another stellar line. Some of us plebes - we never sprout appendages and step out of the mud bath. Ever. And the last two lines: Formidable. I get it on a personal level. I'm not often read but when I am I"m misconstrued - but I'm still slaloming through the swill - so I suppose I've never really said much that merited a listen. Great poem
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Going unnoticed does not mean that you have no merit. It simply means those around you are unobserva.. read moreGoing unnoticed does not mean that you have no merit. It simply means those around you are unobservant to what's important. When I get time I'll take a look at what you've written.
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11 Years Ago
Tam is a star. Writes kickass fiction too :)
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11 Years Ago
Em is my oldest friend here and such a great inspiration. - pre cafe even....like what 2006? Thank y.. read moreEm is my oldest friend here and such a great inspiration. - pre cafe even....like what 2006? Thank you Em. Thank you, Panda. I've been "weird" since 79...
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11 Years Ago
what she isn't saying, she's modest, is that without her there might never have been an Em, she drag.. read morewhat she isn't saying, she's modest, is that without her there might never have been an Em, she dragged me here when i had a handful of little poems and some crazy a*s idea that i might be a poet :D
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11 Years Ago
With no Em there would be no Commanda Panda Fan Club.
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11 Years Ago
just trying to make the world a better place :)
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11 Years Ago
Hugs! Group Hugs! Hug in pairs!
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11 Years Ago
yup, today i think i could fart rainbows
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11 Years Ago
I once had a guy ask for a rainbow shower... yeah. He brought out a tray with an array of colorful f.. read moreI once had a guy ask for a rainbow shower... yeah. He brought out a tray with an array of colorful food. I ran far, far away. Closest I ever came, however, to vomiting rainbows.
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11 Years Ago
sometimes the only thing left to do is run far, far away
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11 Years Ago
Even in spiked heels, when you need to run, you RUN!
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11 Years Ago
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QH2-TGUlwu4
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11 Years Ago
Willy Wonka should be taking notes right now.
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11 Years Ago
You know, we could be onto something! Rainbow showers, really, all you'd need is a large bag of Skit.. read moreYou know, we could be onto something! Rainbow showers, really, all you'd need is a large bag of Skittles...
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11 Years Ago
Never enjoyed Skittles much. Make it M&Ms and we have ourselves a deal.
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:)
"Keep your friends close and your enemies closer."
"God Help Me" by Emilie Autumn
I agree that us females are werecats:P
I have now heard of you.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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Not just android, mein freund, Paranoid Android.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
I have two words for you: the Matrix.
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11 Years Ago
Four words: Glitch in the Matrix.
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11 Years Ago
One word: "Exterminate!"
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11 Years Ago
The command protocol doesn't understand. Not enough 1's and 0's.
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11 Years Ago
WE MUST GO DEEPER!
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11 Years Ago
1-0-0-1-0-0-1 SOS! 1-0-0-1-0-0-1 in distress!
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11 Years Ago
Unit one's in trouble, you know, and it's scared out of its wits!
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11 Years Ago
Someone gave you two way too much sugar tonight.
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11 Years Ago
It's 4:30 AM here where I live, and I just finished 1 Kg of popcorn while watching the last 2 episod.. read moreIt's 4:30 AM here where I live, and I just finished 1 Kg of popcorn while watching the last 2 episodes of Hannibal, "Trou Normand" and "Buffet Froid".
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11 Years Ago
Dangerous combination. I like it.
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11 Years Ago
Nah, not enough alcohol...
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11 Years Ago
I live in one of the college's residences and beer just keeps disappearing from the fridge whenever .. read moreI live in one of the college's residences and beer just keeps disappearing from the fridge whenever I buy it. Sorry Panda, but I'm pretty sure it's the black guys.
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11 Years Ago
One question, do you buy 40 ounce beers? If so, stop. Black people love 40 oz.
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11 Years Ago
Black people in Europe? Surely you jest!
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11 Years Ago
Oh, black people in Europe don't count. They're a different species from black people in the U.S.
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11 Years Ago
Now that I think about it, I do recall seeing one or two and that was in Austria and Germany!
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11 Years Ago
I usually buy 20 cl Super Bock. Portugal is filled to the brim with black people, mainly from one of.. read moreI usually buy 20 cl Super Bock. Portugal is filled to the brim with black people, mainly from one of its former colonies: Angola, Mozambique, Cape Verde, etc...
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11 Years Ago
I'm horrible at geography. Do you speak Spanish? Do Portuguese speak Spanish? I've been drinking.
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11 Years Ago
Portuguese speak Portuguese. Brazil was another colony of Portugal's and that's why they also speak .. read morePortuguese speak Portuguese. Brazil was another colony of Portugal's and that's why they also speak Portuguese. In 1494, King John II of Portugal and King Ferdinand of Spain signed the Treaty of Tordesilles that divided the uncharted territories outside Europe between Portugal and Spain.
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11 Years Ago
(shrugs) I like people from different countries more than people in my own country. They just seem e.. read more(shrugs) I like people from different countries more than people in my own country. They just seem easier to hug.
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11 Years Ago
Me, too, Panda.
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11 Years Ago
I've been to the USA once. The best part were the grizzly bears.
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11 Years Ago
Somebody asked me what it felt like to be black, white and Asian all at once. It feels like sunshine.. read moreSomebody asked me what it felt like to be black, white and Asian all at once. It feels like sunshine in Utah.
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11 Years Ago
My good friend calls himself a Twinkie: Asian (yellow) on the outside, white on the in (granted, he'.. read moreMy good friend calls himself a Twinkie: Asian (yellow) on the outside, white on the in (granted, he's Korean and Caucasian).
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11 Years Ago
I can't seem to think of anything clever for a reply.
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11 Years Ago
That, in and of itself, is a clever reply.
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11 Years Ago
Oh stop it, you!
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11 Years Ago
I simply cannot and will not! Especially if you hook me up with popcorn! Too bad there are no flame .. read moreI simply cannot and will not! Especially if you hook me up with popcorn! Too bad there are no flame wars, tonight, over which to enjoy a buttery bowl...
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11 Years Ago
One does not simply wait for flame wars to happen to enjoy a buttery bowl of popcorn.
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11 Years Ago
Ah, but the taste is so much sweeter (well, savory, really but I hate semantics).
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11 Years Ago
That it is. But whilst we wait for them to happen we can always munch popcorn at the sight of a man .. read moreThat it is. But whilst we wait for them to happen we can always munch popcorn at the sight of a man with an epic voice parodying Twilight: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0gugBiEkLwU
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11 Years Ago
They hit all the relevant points! I feel like I read the books (suicide may be more fun, of course).
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11 Years Ago
They made an Honest Trailer for each one of the 4 movies. The links are in the description. I was pr.. read moreThey made an Honest Trailer for each one of the 4 movies. The links are in the description. I was pro-life until I discovered the existence of this crap.
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11 Years Ago
Regardless of the steaming s**t pile she created, crazy Mormon b***h is laughing all the way to the .. read moreRegardless of the steaming s**t pile she created, crazy Mormon b***h is laughing all the way to the bank but, maybe, if we ignore it, she and her stupid world will disappear into the void where bad-teen-angst-bullshit goes to die.
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11 Years Ago
I heard there is a special place in Hell for these kind of people.
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11 Years Ago
No, I disagree. Satan's a cool cat. He wouldn't dig any of that bullshit, he'd rather eat broken gla.. read moreNo, I disagree. Satan's a cool cat. He wouldn't dig any of that bullshit, he'd rather eat broken glass and chew tin foil, I think. Plus, you know, Plato, Mark Twain, Charles Bukowski, Jack Kerouac, Ernest Hemingway and William Burroughs are keeping him company. I think such great writers would stage a coup if she even breached the gates of fire.
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11 Years Ago
Yeah, you're right. I'll rephrase:
I heard there is a special place in Heaven for thes.. read moreYeah, you're right. I'll rephrase:
I heard there is a special place in Heaven for these kind of people.
After all, isn't that place filled with martyrs already?
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11 Years Ago
Filled to the damn brim...
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11 Years Ago
I'm looking forward to going to Hell.
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11 Years Ago
Dude, Lucy has an air conditioned room with wall to wall wood floors and a field of wild flowers wai.. read moreDude, Lucy has an air conditioned room with wall to wall wood floors and a field of wild flowers waiting for me... and a unicorn...
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11 Years Ago
Who the f**k's Lucy?
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11 Years Ago
Sheesh. LOL, Lucifer... perhaps I should refer to him as Lucky, instead?
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11 Years Ago
No! Big Lou, for f**k's sake!
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11 Years Ago
He likes to wear my bras! He makes a rather fetching Lucy, you know.
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11 Years Ago
That's it! That was the last f*****g straw! From now on I'm only hanging out with Satan.
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11 Years Ago
Nope, we're tight, yo.
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11 Years Ago
I mean, last time we went for a drink, Lou bailed on us and left me to pay the tab.
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11 Years Ago
Nah, he just went to the bathroom for a line. When he came back, you were gone and the tab paid.
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11 Years Ago
We were there for like 2 whole f*****g hours!
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11 Years Ago
It was a fat line...
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11 Years Ago
sorry, panda, i got distracted by the conversation :)
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11 Years Ago
No one ever pays attention to Beelzebub. It's always about Lucifer or Satan.
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11 Years Ago
I should apologize, too. It was a mighty thread-jack.
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11 Years Ago
Panda, Beelzebub is covered in s**t. That's not the sort of company I want when downing some good si.. read morePanda, Beelzebub is covered in s**t. That's not the sort of company I want when downing some good single malt Scotch.
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11 Years Ago
He's the Lord of Flies or Bees or some s**t. Show some respect. :P You're just jealous because he ca.. read moreHe's the Lord of Flies or Bees or some s**t. Show some respect. :P You're just jealous because he can outdrink you hands down.
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11 Years Ago
Who is Krampus?
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11 Years Ago
i'm a trooper, just ask the cavalry :)
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11 Years Ago
Germanic meanie that afflicts bad children at christmas, i figure he is a kind of evil figure, maybe.. read moreGermanic meanie that afflicts bad children at christmas, i figure he is a kind of evil figure, maybe not on the same level with Beelzebub, but unique and original to me all the same
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11 Years Ago
Panda, Beelzebub is the Lord of Flies, and is usually depicted as an gigantic fly, and therefore, co.. read morePanda, Beelzebub is the Lord of Flies, and is usually depicted as an gigantic fly, and therefore, covered in s**t. I'd much prefer to hang out with Belial and Belphegor. The first one brings the Kings, the second, the wenches.
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11 Years Ago
Krampus! He's Austrian. Very frightening. He's Santa's helper. He chases children with a twiggy broo.. read moreKrampus! He's Austrian. Very frightening. He's Santa's helper. He chases children with a twiggy broom and beats them when they've been bad. Source -- lived in Austria for 3 years.
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11 Years Ago
The original versions of modern-day fairytales were far, far grimmer than the ones we hear today. Fo.. read moreThe original versions of modern-day fairytales were far, far grimmer than the ones we hear today. For instance, in "Red Riding Hood", the protagonists eats her grandmother, before being eaten by the wolf.
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11 Years Ago
Oh, he's also a bit of a perv. He loves to watch women through the windows of their homes and stick .. read moreOh, he's also a bit of a perv. He loves to watch women through the windows of their homes and stick his rather long tongue out at them.
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11 Years Ago
The step-sisters in Cinderella cut off their heels and their toes, respectively, so their feet will .. read moreThe step-sisters in Cinderella cut off their heels and their toes, respectively, so their feet will fit into the glass slipper. The little animals sing out to the prince to check the slipper as it's been filled with blood.... eww.
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11 Years Ago
as i'm eating lunch, i may skip the rest of this festive conversation
laters :)
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11 Years Ago
I like this guy. I might just invite him over for coffee and biscuits.
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11 Years Ago
In either "Snow White and the Seven Dwarves" or "The Sleeping Beauty", a King wonders through the wo.. read moreIn either "Snow White and the Seven Dwarves" or "The Sleeping Beauty", a King wonders through the woods were the protagonist is fast asleep and has sex with her. She wakes up, 9 months later, giving birth to twins.
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I spent one very long night reading most of the original versions of the fairytales. Scary, scary st.. read moreI spent one very long night reading most of the original versions of the fairytales. Scary, scary stuff! I love how dark they were. All very cautionary, some terrible.
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11 Years Ago
That's Sleeping Beauty. Then the Queen (the Prince's mother) tries to kill and eat the babies.
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11 Years Ago
I am currently working on darker versions of these versions, as to include the following: cannibalis.. read moreI am currently working on darker versions of these versions, as to include the following: cannibalism, murder, necrophilia, sodomy, torture, etc...
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11 Years Ago
I have some problems telling them apart.
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11 Years Ago
All of that is pretty much already in the fairytales.
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11 Years Ago
Yeah, sure. But in my version of "The Nightingale", the Emperor eats the bird, and later dies, as hi.. read moreYeah, sure. But in my version of "The Nightingale", the Emperor eats the bird, and later dies, as his flesh is pecked by countless carrion birds.
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Great quick little rhyme. For some reason it made me think of the chorus to the song "Tourniquet" by Marilyn Manson. "Take your hatred out on me/ make your victim my neck/ you never ever believed in me/ I'm you tourniquet." Manson's version is just Okay. A band called "Rasputina" do a great cover of it. So does another band called "Bile." I was probably reading the poem to the beat of "Tourniquet." I unconsciously read poems to song beats all the time.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
That's actually one of my favorite songs by MM. Usually he has a message in his songs, but most peop.. read moreThat's actually one of my favorite songs by MM. Usually he has a message in his songs, but most people miss it.
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Commanda Panda is a screenwriter and owner of indie film company Commanda Panda Productions. At one time he was more of a poet and lyric writer, but now he only writes poems and lyrics from time to ti.. more..
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