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A Poem by Comedy Is No Fool
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(Dec.20) So I started to write a short poem of how I feel. So in about 5 minutes i came up with this. I don't know if its good.This poems about how everyone at school are a******s and don't even think how hard anyone else's life is. How every f****n kid p

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Await the Open door
Prize of a civil fight
Enemies of the weak adore
Pride in my fallen sight

Prisoner of abusive class
Strong opinion of my life
Mental pounding over sass
Unknowing of the piercing knife

Image of a harmless jest
Incessantly  I've come to endure
As if only to cause the once undressed
And refuse the decision of the injure

No connection of trust
Forceful blame of no crime
They continue as I rust
Their charitable Infliction time after time...after time.

© 2008 Comedy Is No Fool


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Comedy Is No Fool
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I love how your vocabulary is just enhanced enough that it keeps you going.
But, not so much that you've got no idea what the words mean.

This, I like.
Reminds me of parents, authority figures, trying to tell you what to do.
At least, thats me. Good job.
=]

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very nice! :) I like your simple choice of words and the fact that you knew how to use a rhyme scheme without allowing it to become "sing-songy". In fact, I think that the rhyme served to strengthen the force of the poem. Beautiful symbolism. Thanks for the wonderful read.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Your style is simple yet your choice of words is very interesting, at first it seems like it doesn't reveal much yet it conveys a strong, clear message.
I loved it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Fly the plane

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Added on September 23, 2008
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Comedy Is No Fool
Comedy Is No Fool

Lake Forest, CA



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What Kind Of Writer Am I?: I am a complex writer to be honest. I never settle and that has been my biggest flaw. To me none of my work is good enough and with that I have almost 4 unfinished novels.... more..

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