Charcoal Melody

There is a sensation that overtakes me in its wake
Some forlorn lullaby that has been trapped in a box for far too long
I air the room with its contents
Take a deep breath in
Surround myself with the ease of it

If acceptance is a small a quiet room
Isolation makes it cold
Possessing my feet to pace the floor
In front of this easel for warmth
Charcoal to paper, shaping echos of your hair in waves
The darkest lines of grey scale masterpiece
Calling you back to me

Some kind of madness
Romancing the thought
Use this pencil to outline the hands
I never could bring myself to touch
A sweet serenade of such a murderous refrain

I can hear your advisory of caution over the chant I'm making
But lacking a cipher and common sense I just keep on composing
Mapping the lines of your face as if they are my guide to the stars

Reviews

[Faded]

"A sweet serenade of such a murderous refrain"...
oh yet another one I can relate too so deeply for the reasons I described in my last review. I've been wanting to write out the emotion of this predicament, but I think I won't bother to try now. You've done it so much more perfectly than I could!

[Comewhatevermay]

Aww, the compliment means a lot to me, but you should. Every voice on a subject brings a different perspective. Also, when the heart aches to write about something you should always listen. Thank you so much for your review.

[Faded]

I'll update you when I get around to writing it out haha. You're very welcome

[Unknown Poet]

Amazing metaphorical sentences .. and fantastic use of words ... Superb ... I read 2 times to understand... Great work .. :):)

[Comewhatevermay]

Thank you so much for your review.

[Unknown Poet]

My pleasure :)

[Abhijeet Kumar]

Great write, keep on writing.

[Comewhatevermay]

As always, as ever. Thank you

[Re-Pete]

Wonderfully done. "If acceptance is a small a quiet room
Isolation makes it cold" - fabulous. Flows great. Most excellent title. You are very gifted at expressing feelings.

[Comewhatevermay]

Thank you, Pete. I'm good at expressing them in writing, not so much in person.

[Re-Pete]

Join the club ...

[Robert Haigh]

A beautifull write, full of artistic and poetic expression! Well penned indeed!

[Comewhatevermay]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Robert.

[Lorry]

Oh, I like. Some kind of madness, romancing the thought...what a vivid line, capturing the intensity of feeling you are trying to capture in your art, all the emotions bundled tight, heat - warmth - the chanting and the sweet refrain, all beautifully collide within the chaos of trying to portray on paper, what is seen in your head and felt in your heart...all culminating in such a perfect ending, mapping the lines of their face as if they are your map to the stars. This is spectacularly brilliant. :)

[Comewhatevermay]

Thank you so much, Nemo. I really have you to thank. I was inspired to put a twist on it after reading your I Wish I was An Artist. Made me contemplate the duality of being both a writer and artist and how to combine the two to make a masterpiece. I'll message you the drawing when I'm done. You can tell the tone changes about 1/3 of the way down. But I think it gives it the feel of building up to something.

[Lorry]

Well you made a great job of it :)