My Precious One

My Precious One

A Poem by Comatose

Tell me the things

I need to know

Sights I should see,

Before the final blow

Mirror my feelings,

The ones I hid from you

Truest emotion,

True as the sky is blue

Mark me where I stand,

And erase all my doubs

Mark me where I stand,

On every spot that I count

Show you my ambition,

Naked, raw, and full

And stay with me, my precious one,

My slowly darkening jewel.

© 2010 Comatose


Author's Note

Comatose
Thoughts coagulated into words

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The rhythm in this one is so smooth...and the last line is like a soft Bam! =)

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Comatose

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