Belong

Belong

A Poem by Colton Warr

She belongs in the temporary moments of a dream 

Taking me away from my nightmare screams

On my knees for my sins, her love redeems

She has, to this day, been my one and only theme 

She belongs to an unknown planet out in space 

I am crash landing and so I brace

The way back home I never want to retrace

Forever we are to roam the stars, hands interlaced

She belongs in the great blue sky

If up is not the way then I have gone awry

We can lay with the clouds until we die

If her touch is the rain, I never want to be dry

She belongs to the vastness of the ocean

Which ever way her tide pulls, that is my motion

Like to the sand the waters soaks, she is my devotion

I have crashed into her like a wave and I love the commotion

She belongs to all of the wonders of our galaxy

She belongs to all of history’s kings and queens

She belongs to the Angel who plays the harp and sings

She belongs to every golden thing, yet here she is kissing me 

Reviews

[rickm97]

Love is the true sweetness of life. Nothing compares.
It is everything...
...in its absence we are nothing except lost, awaiting that gentle rush to overwhelm us once again.
It is life's greatest joy...
...and its greatest pain.
It is as a dichotomy in nature.
I miss her so.

Well done, my friend.
I hope that you find love as true as that of my Karin...
...for then you will have everything.

[Colton Warr]

I could have not said it any better than that, my friend! So beautiful! I can't even begin to imagine or comprehend how it would feel to lose someone as perfect as your wife must have been. And I know she was because she picked a strong and loving man to be with. You will see her again one day and you will get to be with her for all of eternity. I am so grateful that you read this piece!

P.S. It makes my soul happy that my words can remind you of someone who sounds like an angel. Just wanted to thank you for giving me that opportunity. Thank you for your support.

[rickm97]

She was the strong one, and she truly was an angel.
But she, like all of us, was flawed and had her struggles.
Life can get very ugly sometimes, and soon I'll try to depict her courage in dealing with it.
Thanks.

[Jadene Hartley]

This is such a beautiful poem, thank you so much for requesting me to read it, such a great adventure!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Jadene! I appreciate your kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thank you very much for taking the time out to give this a read!

[Valentine]

Whoa........sounds like you have landed a keeper. If stars are exploding, hold on tight. Valentine

[Colton Warr]

I believe I have, Valentine! I'm glad this piece shows that, too. I appreciate the advice, I'm holding on as tight as I can, believe me! Thank you very much for giving this a read!

[Kimberly Miller]

This is beautiful! I especially enjoyed the last stanza, the emotion in this is so pure and powerful, what an lovely poem. Keep up the awesome work! :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Kimberly! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and could feel the emotion within these words! Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[Kimberly Miller]

Your welcome! Absolutely! I look forward to more of your work!

[Tomoe Tellez]

"She belongs to every golden thing, yet here she is kissing me"
Very lovely poem.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Alondra! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!

[Tomoe Tellez]

No, thank you for sharing :).

[Amy R]

This was superb, I could've felt all the feelings as I read along!
thanks for sharing this lovely piece.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Amy! I appreciate the kind and encouraging words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and could feel the emotion! Thank you for giving this a read!

[Amy R]

ur welcome Colton :) looking forward in reading more of ur work :)

[SheJayBen]

Oh my this is absolutely beautiful!! I almost feel jealous of the woman in this poem!! Just amazing how I can feel every emotion as you speak about it. Lovely Colton, I love it!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! :) I appreciate the sweet words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and I'm very happy you could feel the emotion within these words! Thank you so much for reading!

[Red3Bravo]

I like the repeating "she belongs..." lines. I really feel like the rhyme scheme is holding you back, forcing out lines and word choices that aren't as good as they could be. I would keep the first line of each stanza. Then, rather than try to rhyme, I would focus on building the world implied by that first line. This approach would eliminate the need for awkward word choices and allow for greater specificity. Rhyming is not terribly difficult. Rhyming and still expressing your specific individual thoughts in all their original glory is hard. We start to sound cliched or we lose the nuances that make our experience unique.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate you being honest with your opinion on here. That means a lot to me. I appreciate the advice you gave and will take note of it. I'm glad this piece got your head gears turning. Thank you very much for giving his a read, my friend!

[Edis Radoncic]

I can relate to this. Sometimes it feels like when you are with someone that you love and then you wonder why they are with you. As if she is too good for you but she sticks with you anyways. It is how I interpret it haha. Great job!

[Colton Warr]

Exactly! Well said, Edis! I completely agree! That's part of the theme with this piece, you hit it right on the nail! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, my friend! Thank you for giving it a read!

[Edis Radoncic]

No problem man!

[Rachel]

Wow, very good job on this. You're a very talented writer!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Rachel! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[jeannemarie coulter]

a fine tribute to one loved beyond time and space

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, JeanneMarie! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!