An Undelivered Poem

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An Undelivered Poem

A Poem by Colton Warr

I feel unsettled and missing

Like a nomad traveling through an unknown land

Nettled and Reminiscing 

I once knew every small texture of your hand

I feel confused and paranoid

Like a man who had just committed murder

Fused and Destroyed 

My mind does everything to preserve her 

I feel soulless and guilty

Like the Grim Reaper who comes to take 

Boneless and Filthy 

I am broken in ways I did not know I could break 

I feel stressed and disturbed 

Like a student before the final exam

Oppressed and Perturbed 

I think I have given you all that I am

*****

Could I ask?

Do you sometimes feel as if you’re going through the motions?

Drink from my flask

I beg to again be lost within your ocean

Could I touch?

Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?

Your hearts clutch

Shackle me in, never again to disband 

Could I kiss?

Do you sometimes still gaze into nothing, wishing it was me?

I guess I miss,

Whenever you were the only thing I would ever see

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry my friend. You brought me in and held me to the last words.
"Could I touch?
Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?
Your hearts clutch
Shackle me in, never again to disband
Could I kiss?"
The above lines are amazing. I could write a complete poem from these words and emotion. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Coyote! I'm happy you enjoyed this poem! Your words are always so kind and encouraging, I deeply appreciate that! The emotion was strong in this one for me and these words cut deep. If you remember my poem "She is..." This is about the same girl, we are no longer together and it is from my doing. Even after all that she is still my muse though, isn't that interesting? Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read, my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

We don't forget and you are welcome.

[Paramount]

I absolutely loved every line of it. I do not know what else to say. It was just amazing. This is an incredible piece of poetry. Well done.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Kelsey Schadt]

Deep.

I do have a suggestion though,

Like a man who had just committed murder

the second lines in the rest of your stanzas aren't past tense. Is there a reason for writing in past here? Otherwise I would consider revising.

[Colton Warr]

I am happy that you could tell how deep this piece cut for me. I did indeed intend for that one particular line to be in past tense, I appreciate you pointing it out though and checking. We as writers must hold each other accountable for the smaller things like that. I wanted that line to be in past tense because I truly felt that the love that I had thrown away was an act of murder that I had committed, and I wanted that in past tense to signify that I was prepared to move on from it. Thanks for stopping by and giving this one a read!

[Amber Albores]

Very touching and i'm going through this right now in my marriage. Beautiful poem love it

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Amber! I'm happy you were able to relate to these words. I hope your situation gets better, with time. All of the best wishes to you. Thank you for giving this piece a read!

[Amber Albores]

No problem: ) and thanks for your kind words

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Man this is true art and just connects deeply.
So sorry I haven't read your work sooner for it was my loss.
Hell man you can hit them out of the park and this write truly displays that.

Stay crazy Gonzo

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, John! Your words are too kind! This review made my night! I'm glad this could connect with you on a deep level. The emotion in this piece is real for me, it is based on what I had been going through. It cut deep. Thank you so much for stopping by and giving this a read! And thank you, again, for the positive and encouraging words!

[ķřăźŷ_ĺīļ_āľ�..]

Great piece I've ever read! Amazing!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words! Thanks for stopping by and giving this one a read!

[ķřăźŷ_ĺīļ_āľĩĕņ]

Likewise my friend

[Cladine]

I felt the emotion. The feeling when you longed for someone that has already gone . Those thoughts that are wandering around. Everything right in the heart.I love it.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Cladine! I'm so happy you could feel the emotion within this piece! It cut too deep to pen. The thoughts, they never cease to wander, not when one had a love like I did. Thank you so much for the kind words and thank you so much for stopping by and checking this one out!

[jeannemarie coulter]

the loss and longing in this piece rends the heartsoul of this reader...like standing on a cliff and trying to reach someone through the mists of time long passed...very powerful poem, colton...

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you could feel the feeling of longing and loss within this piece, it cut deep to pen. I love the way you put that last statement, trying to reach someone through the mists of time, so beautiful. Thanks for giving this one a read!

[David Berger]

What a truly spectacular piece of evocative poetry, Colton. The continuous use of "I feel..." provided the emphasis that made this poem so personal, so strong for me. I especially like the contrast of "fused and destroyed" in the second stanza. To be both at the same time is a powerful, understandable emotion. The single mention of "her" tells me this is the speaker's heart, and although the voice is lamenting, the focus isn't on who she is/was; rather, it seems like the focus is more on the broken nature of the speaker.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, David! Your words are too kind! I appreciate the positivity and encouragement! I'm so happy you were able to relate to this piece and relate to the emotion within its words. This one cut deep for me to pen. It is indeed about the loss of a loved one and the broken state in which it left the writer. You have hit it right on the head again, my friend! Thanks for giving this one a read!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Very stirring and painful. I think we've all been there, in chaos of all possible emotions when we separate from our beloved one. You've opened up the wounds of the past, but in a good way. Thank you!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Nadia! I love the way you put that, opened up the wounds of the past, so pretty. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and were able to relate to its emotion! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I have indeed! Thank you for sharing!

[Captain Rilen]

Beautiful piece, I very much liked the structure of this poem, the repetitions were quite well placed and made for an entrancingly sad read. Keep up the awesome poetry :D

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Kirk! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping by and checking this one out!

[Wandervogel]

loaded with emotions.....such a powerful imagery....keep sharing

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within these words. Thanks for stopping by and giving this one a read!