An Undelivered Poem

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An Undelivered Poem

A Poem by Colton Warr

I feel unsettled and missing

Like a nomad traveling through an unknown land

Nettled and Reminiscing 

I once knew every small texture of your hand

I feel confused and paranoid

Like a man who had just committed murder

Fused and Destroyed 

My mind does everything to preserve her 

I feel soulless and guilty

Like the Grim Reaper who comes to take 

Boneless and Filthy 

I am broken in ways I did not know I could break 

I feel stressed and disturbed 

Like a student before the final exam

Oppressed and Perturbed 

I think I have given you all that I am

*****

Could I ask?

Do you sometimes feel as if you’re going through the motions?

Drink from my flask

I beg to again be lost within your ocean

Could I touch?

Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?

Your hearts clutch

Shackle me in, never again to disband 

Could I kiss?

Do you sometimes still gaze into nothing, wishing it was me?

I guess I miss,

Whenever you were the only thing I would ever see

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry my friend. You brought me in and held me to the last words.
"Could I touch?
Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?
Your hearts clutch
Shackle me in, never again to disband
Could I kiss?"
The above lines are amazing. I could write a complete poem from these words and emotion. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Coyote! I'm happy you enjoyed this poem! Your words are always so kind and encouraging, I deeply appreciate that! The emotion was strong in this one for me and these words cut deep. If you remember my poem "She is..." This is about the same girl, we are no longer together and it is from my doing. Even after all that she is still my muse though, isn't that interesting? Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read, my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

We don't forget and you are welcome.

[Paramount]

I absolutely loved every line of it. I do not know what else to say. It was just amazing. This is an incredible piece of poetry. Well done.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[GPR]

Such a beautiful poem :) Loved it!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[GPR]

You're welcome :)

[E.L. Debbage]

I found the voice in my head sang whilst reading this, haha! Brilliant poem.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, E.L. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! And I'm happy that you had a voice in your head singing this! Perhaps you could share the melody and we can make it a song! ;) Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[JulianaSun]

As I was saying, you are a very talented writer. What else could I say? Your poems speak for themselves :)

J

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my dear friend! Your words are full of positivity and encouragement! I thank you so much for that. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece as well! Thank you so much for reading!

[Irenic]

I feel unsettled and missing
Like a nomad traveling through an unknown land
Nettled and Reminiscing
I once knew every small texture of your hand

I feel confused and paranoid
Like a man who had just committed murder
Fused and Destroyed
My mind does everything to preserve her

You have taken a pic of the feeling of melancholiness from the so-called camera: words.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my dear friend! I love how you put that last line! I appreciate you stopping by and giving this a read! Thanks for the positivity!

[Irenic]

Welcome...........................................:)
and thank you :)

[Olivia]

I was reading this and I couldn't stop smiling. I love it so much. This piece was what I was looking for.
Awesome work.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Olivia! I'm happy that something that I wrote could give you such a reaction. That is the ultimate reward, in my opinion. I appreciate your kind words! Thank you so much for giving this piece a read!

[T.Y Abdul]

Seriously, Unbelievable. The last part impressed me, the way it was fashioned, almost like a shattered heart breeding for life. I like it. Good work.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! Your words are too kind! I am forever grateful for the positivity and encouragement! I'm happy you enjoyed the piece! I'm glad you said what you said about the last section, I was indeed going for a certain "brokenness" and you picked up on it with shattered. Sometimes there is art in the format of a poem! Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[T.Y Abdul]

Keep it up!

[Fran Marie]

Deep emotions spill forth in this piece..filled with vivid imagery
And so well-written and expressed..

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Fran Marie! I appreciate the kind words and the encouragement! You are too sweet! I'm so happy you enjoyed this piece! Thank you so much for taking the time out to read this!

[Shirlena]

Thanks for extending your friendship and this poem is entrancing, mesmerizing even. It's easy to be hypnotized by a good rendition of the subject of love though.

[Colton Warr]

I agree with that! Love is always an entrancing subject. It is easy for us to fall into that no matter which way it is conveyed. Thank you for accepting the friendship! I appreciate the kind words as to the poem! Thank you for giving it a read! I look forward to reading some of your work!

[Indra Neil]

profound and poignant imagery! amazing write!! bravo!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so very much, my friend! I appreciate your kind and encouraging words! Thank you so much for giving this piece a read!

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome!

[Maja]

The whole poem was heartbreaking, because it gives the impression that a long time has already passed yet these thoughts are still in the persona's mind. It was perfect and I loved it but I suggest that this line be changed:

"Like a student before the final exam"

Because for some reason it felt out of place and it took me out of my immersion in your poem. But other than that, it was such a lovely, painful read.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Maja! I'm happy you found this piece heartbreaking and I'm glad you enjoyed the piece as a whole. You are indeed the second person to point out that line and its possible misplacement. Perhaps I should look into a small revision. I appreciate you voicing your opinion on the line. Be on the lookout for a possible revision. Thank you so much for giving this piece a read!

[Maja]

It was my pleasure. :)