An Undelivered Poem

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An Undelivered Poem

A Poem by Colton Warr

I feel unsettled and missing

Like a nomad traveling through an unknown land

Nettled and Reminiscing 

I once knew every small texture of your hand

I feel confused and paranoid

Like a man who had just committed murder

Fused and Destroyed 

My mind does everything to preserve her 

I feel soulless and guilty

Like the Grim Reaper who comes to take 

Boneless and Filthy 

I am broken in ways I did not know I could break 

I feel stressed and disturbed 

Like a student before the final exam

Oppressed and Perturbed 

I think I have given you all that I am

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Could I ask?

Do you sometimes feel as if you’re going through the motions?

Drink from my flask

I beg to again be lost within your ocean

Could I touch?

Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?

Your hearts clutch

Shackle me in, never again to disband 

Could I kiss?

Do you sometimes still gaze into nothing, wishing it was me?

I guess I miss,

Whenever you were the only thing I would ever see

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry my friend. You brought me in and held me to the last words.
"Could I touch?
Do you sometimes reach out for my face with your hand?
Your hearts clutch
Shackle me in, never again to disband
Could I kiss?"
The above lines are amazing. I could write a complete poem from these words and emotion. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Coyote! I'm happy you enjoyed this poem! Your words are always so kind and encouraging, I deeply appreciate that! The emotion was strong in this one for me and these words cut deep. If you remember my poem "She is..." This is about the same girl, we are no longer together and it is from my doing. Even after all that she is still my muse though, isn't that interesting? Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read, my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

We don't forget and you are welcome.

[Paramount]

I absolutely loved every line of it. I do not know what else to say. It was just amazing. This is an incredible piece of poetry. Well done.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Stephen]

Full of emotions that draw the reader in and makes them feel the poetry. This is really well done. thanks for sharing

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Stephen! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you liked this piece! Thanks for stopping by and checking this one out!

[D.R.S.]

Breathtaking, just breathtaking. All of your work is simply brilliant, but this has ought to be your best piece yet. I love how not only the words flow together so perfectly, but you can feel the pain in this. It is amazing, truly amazing.
My favorite part of this entire poem, though, has got to be
"I feel soulless and guilty
Like the Grim Reaper who comes to take
Boneless and Filthy
I am broken in ways I did not know I could break"
Astonishing work. :)
DRS

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much!! I appreciate your kind words! You are too sweet! I appreciate the positivity and encouragement, this review made my day! I'm glad you enjoyed this and could feel the pain and emotion within these words. Thank you so much for giving this one a read!

[marcus]

Beautiful!! Really good. Tight structure, great allusions, and full of passion and meaning!!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Marcus! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thanks for giving it a read!

[piper]

HI Colton,

These lines reach out and draw emotion, strong and powerful metaphors, they really evoke feelings of loss and pain, beautiful work.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Piper! I'm glad you were able feel the emotions in this one. I appreciate the kind words! Thanks for giving this one a read!

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome write Colton... loved it!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Aaron! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for giving it a read!

[erinwrites]

I like the line "My mind does everything to preserve her." It's really heartbreaking knowing that this woman clearly isn't in his life anymore, and he's desperately trying to hold on to all the memories. Very well written, it really makes the reader feel something

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm happy you liked this one! I'm glad you were able to feel the emotion in this piece, theres a lot and it cut deep for me to pen. Thanks for giving it a read!

[Sydney]

I have to give it to you, this is a great piece. "I am broken in ways I did not know I could break " almost broke my heart with that line. THIS is talent, very very well written, thought out, well rounded. Thank you for sharing this

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Sydney! Your words are too kind! I appreciate the positive energy! I'm glad you felt the emotion wrapped within every word, this one cut deep for me to pen. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Sydney]

You're very welcome! Really enjoyed reading this, not just saying that to say it.

[guy drori]

He sounds very lonesome. Again...your choice of words really resonates, and created a "feeling" in me, the reader, of mostly emptiness. I could read on his anger and frustration. He hasn't quite entirely found himself in this world. He wants something, which I am guessing is a woman, yet he cannot have her for their feelings towards each other isn't mutual. As I have told you before you are somehow able to put in rhyming without it sounding forced upon. That along with the enjabments create a very good flow for the poem. Also from my point of view, he wants someone to understand his feelings, even though sometimes not understanding them himself.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Guy! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! My friend, you are absolutely right on all accounts. You nailed it. There is a heavy aroma of loneliness and frustration in this piece. And indeed, the words could also suggest that I have not yet found myself. A woman is definitely the main driving force in this one. One that I once had and now I've lost and I don't know if I can get back. Your words, as always are so very kind, my friend! I appreciate you taking the time to read this one! I'm glad you were able to feel the emotion in this, you literally nailed the feelings I was trying to convey with this one.

[guy drori]

Glad I was able to pick up on your intentions ;)

[DoormanDan]

You've written a (dare I say breakup poem?) that's a good ten thousand feet above the clichéd, boring, generic kind, and I applaud you for that. It takes a good writer to take something that has already been done before, and make it fresh again. Fantastic job! :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, DoormanDan! I love this review! Thank you so much for the kind words and the positive energy! You are too kind! I knew I was embarking on a difficult task because of how many times its been done. I'm glad I was able to do it in a refreshing manner! Thanks for giving this one a read, my friend!

[lonewolf225]

Great word choice and rhythm. I love the poem. Your words flow from the page in an amazing way :) keep writing and I can't wait to read more!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! You are too kind! I'm glad you liked this one! Thanks for stopping by and checking this out!