A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II 

A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done

What's in the past is in the past

But thinking and missing you

Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 

It would haunt you to know 

I've been where you are 

When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 

Do you think that we are dead? 

Your answer means the world to me

Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me

Their whispers washing me away from you 

The weight of the sea was crushing

The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men

Well perhaps that is the case

Would you like to know my vexing?  

Just a glimpse of your darling face 

 

The water was rushing in 

I had to abandon ship 

You may never forgive me 

That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

*****

The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 

My heart reaches out for you

Into my mind you have crept 

Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 

My eyes see a shimmering sight

Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 

You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 

They encircle me as if welcoming me in 

The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 

It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 

With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 

I am not dead but I cannot breathe 

I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

Reviews

[dan]

Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

[Colton Warr]

Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothing but positive vibes! Thank you so much for your continuing support and encouragement! Again, its reviews like these that give me juice to keep going! I am so happy you liked this one! I was playing this one close to the chest, I've been feeling something like this lately below the surface of what I put out to people. This poem was a great release for me. Thank you so much for giving this one a read! It is always a pleasure and privilege to hear your feedback! Take care, Dan!

[theshygirl]

damn the emotion , i love it so intense
well written

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you love it! I appreciate the kind words and I appreciate you giving this one a read!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Brilliant write... very emotional....good work Colton

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! Thanks for giving this one a read!

[Willard Wells]

Lots of imagery as love is maybe lost and maybe not in the first. The second is more dispar and trying to survive. Very beautiful words.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Willard! I'm happy you enjoyed this one! Thank you for the kind words and thank you for reading!

[B]

The man at the bottom of the sea drowned in her love
Tangled in her hair
And loving every second
Suffocating for air
Lost in the world deep below

I love it

[Colton Warr]

Yes! I'm happy that you enjoyed this one and felt it the way you did! Thank you for reading!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Very well done my friend:) rating this one 100#

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I do appreciate your encouragement and support! Thanks for giving this one a read! Always a pleasure to hear from you!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome.

[AaronFreitas]

This is an emotional piece but a beautiful one my friend. I enjoyed reading it and glad you sent a RR for this one. Great write :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Aaron! I'm glad you like this one! I appreciate you giving it a read and sending positive vibes my way!

[Perkele.7885]

Poem #1 The note in the bottle does not seem to ask any questions or deal with anything of any import. The question are rather silly if you are wanting my opinion of the dialogue. The poem, I found to be well written but, the content of little substance.
Poem #2 I found this to be the better of the two poems. This one spoke to a possibility of an adventure to be had and enjoyed.
I enjoyed reviewing your work.

[Colton Warr]

Thanks for reading, I appreciate the review.

[marcus]

A beautiful analogy!!!!!!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Marcus! I'm happy you enjoyed this one! Thank you for the positivity and thank you for reading!

[marcus]

My pleasure, you're a good writer!

[Colton Warr]

I appreciate you saying that, Marcus, I really do! Thank you for these positive vibes and thank you for the support!

[wordman]

colton this is a great write my friend

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm happy that you liked it! I always appreciate you reading and giving positive feedback! Thank you, sir!