A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II 

A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done

What's in the past is in the past

But thinking and missing you

Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 

It would haunt you to know 

I've been where you are 

When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 

Do you think that we are dead? 

Your answer means the world to me

Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me

Their whispers washing me away from you 

The weight of the sea was crushing

The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men

Well perhaps that is the case

Would you like to know my vexing?  

Just a glimpse of your darling face 

 

The water was rushing in 

I had to abandon ship 

You may never forgive me 

That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

*****

The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 

My heart reaches out for you

Into my mind you have crept 

Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 

My eyes see a shimmering sight

Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 

You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 

They encircle me as if welcoming me in 

The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 

It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 

With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 

I am not dead but I cannot breathe 

I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

Reviews

[dan]

Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

[Colton Warr]

Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothing but positive vibes! Thank you so much for your continuing support and encouragement! Again, its reviews like these that give me juice to keep going! I am so happy you liked this one! I was playing this one close to the chest, I've been feeling something like this lately below the surface of what I put out to people. This poem was a great release for me. Thank you so much for giving this one a read! It is always a pleasure and privilege to hear your feedback! Take care, Dan!

[Jamestown]

Well written and expressed!
You definitely picked words and fit them in great placement
to get the point across of a lost and alone soul, well done:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you, my good friend! Your kind and encouraging words are always welcomed! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for taking the time out to give it a read!

[Jamestown]

U R welcome and keep that pen moving, lol!

[Jeremy Hiles]

Great job! Excellent wording to describe the feelings of being lost and alone and losing hope, it definitely makes the reader take time to think about it! But there is always hope to be found, if one decides to go looking for it! Great job, keep it up!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Jeremy! I appreciate you giving this one a read! This one speaks a lot to where I am right now. I do agree with you, though, there is always hope to be found! I like the way you put that. Thanks for the positive words, my friend!

[Jeremy Hiles]

You are very welcome! Well, the tough times make us who we are more so than the good times, so just push through! Thank you, gotta keep hope! And you are welcome, my friend!

[Robert]

Hey Colton, This was a very emotional piece that you have shared. In the poem it seems as this person is so lost and doesn't know how to get out of the depths of despair or quilt that he has. But I think nothing will last forever, if that someone seeks forgiveness and surround themselves with people they love, is the best medicine. Great write Colton.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Robert! I'm glad you liked the piece! Just a little bit of what I've been going through lately. I do agree, though. Love and forgiveness is the best medicine for anyone going through something like this. I am trying, my friend! Thanks for reading!