A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II 

A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done

What's in the past is in the past

But thinking and missing you

Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 

It would haunt you to know 

I've been where you are 

When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 

Do you think that we are dead? 

Your answer means the world to me

Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me

Their whispers washing me away from you 

The weight of the sea was crushing

The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men

Well perhaps that is the case

Would you like to know my vexing?  

Just a glimpse of your darling face 

 

The water was rushing in 

I had to abandon ship 

You may never forgive me 

That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

*****

The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 

My heart reaches out for you

Into my mind you have crept 

Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 

My eyes see a shimmering sight

Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 

You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 

They encircle me as if welcoming me in 

The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 

It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 

With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 

I am not dead but I cannot breathe 

I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

Reviews

[dan]

Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

[Colton Warr]

Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothing but positive vibes! Thank you so much for your continuing support and encouragement! Again, its reviews like these that give me juice to keep going! I am so happy you liked this one! I was playing this one close to the chest, I've been feeling something like this lately below the surface of what I put out to people. This poem was a great release for me. Thank you so much for giving this one a read! It is always a pleasure and privilege to hear your feedback! Take care, Dan!

[Sreenath]

to be honest it is the long ride of emotions ,tender mix of deep inner feeling, i could never stop it reading again and again impressive... enjoyed reading it great work... keep smiling :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I appreciate the kind and positive words! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within each word, this one cut deep for me. Thanks for giving this a read!

[Sheryl]

Wow, your imagination is remarkable, you held me spellbound the through both poems,
Your verbiage is excellent and your never die romanticism is enthralling...this was a very
emotive and great metaphorical piece. I absolutely fell in love with the close on part 11,
you have an uncanny ability to draw your reader in a make them feel what you write,
beautiful penning....LOve, Sheryl

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Sheryl! I appreciate the kind words! You are too sweet! Your words of encouragement and positivity have made my day! I love the way you put that "Never die romanticism" I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and i'm glad you were able to feel the emotion and depth of it. This one cut deep for me so I'm glad you were able to feel that through the words. Thank you very much for giving this a read!

[Sheryl]

It was My Pleasure Colton, I'm looking forward to many more reads
as time permits...Sheryl

[BLitZeD]

that was deep man, good one

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for stopping by and checking it out!

[andrew mitchell]

Epic Write Excellent imagery. Well thought, Very good!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Andrew! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[lovesrgraham]

This is beautifully written!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for giving it a read!

[lovesrgraham]

No problem. Anytime!

[Jacklyn]

This is truly beautiful. I love your imagery, the way you tell your story. Fantastic. :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Jacklyn! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy you liked this one! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Jacklyn]

No problem:)

[Esha Chakravarty]

Extremely well written...keep it up!!!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Esha! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for reading!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leslie Philbert encapsulates these verses so well.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, John! I'm happy you agree with his comments and enjoyed the piece! Thanks for giving this one a read!

[Leslie Philibert]

Excellent quatrains here, fine rhymes...this all fits amd work, you write very well.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Leslie! I appreciate the kind and encouraging words! Thank you for giving this a read and thanks for the continuing support!

[Thesecuts]

This couldn't be more perfect.
-H

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping by and checking it out!