A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II 

A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done

What's in the past is in the past

But thinking and missing you

Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 

It would haunt you to know 

I've been where you are 

When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 

Do you think that we are dead? 

Your answer means the world to me

Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me

Their whispers washing me away from you 

The weight of the sea was crushing

The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men

Well perhaps that is the case

Would you like to know my vexing?  

Just a glimpse of your darling face 

 

The water was rushing in 

I had to abandon ship 

You may never forgive me 

That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

*****

The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 

My heart reaches out for you

Into my mind you have crept 

Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 

My eyes see a shimmering sight

Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 

You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 

They encircle me as if welcoming me in 

The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 

It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 

With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 

I am not dead but I cannot breathe 

I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

Reviews

[dan]

Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

[Colton Warr]

Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothing but positive vibes! Thank you so much for your continuing support and encouragement! Again, its reviews like these that give me juice to keep going! I am so happy you liked this one! I was playing this one close to the chest, I've been feeling something like this lately below the surface of what I put out to people. This poem was a great release for me. Thank you so much for giving this one a read! It is always a pleasure and privilege to hear your feedback! Take care, Dan!

[Jeyanthi]

A note in bottle....
I like to deep dive and help you to come and see the sunshine again..

This poem having power that anyone read can be drown...

[Aarea]

Wow. Your poem is amazing. Your word choice set a perfect mood, and it certainly contains a lot of tangible emotion. Well done!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and could feel the emotion. Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!

[Terrence Chang]

Your penmanship is quite remarkable I must say. Keep up the good work Colton

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Terrence! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and I appreciate you taking the time out to read this!

[Terrence Chang]

Your welcome and it was my pleasure

[Bella]

I absolutely love The Man at the Bottom of The Sea. I think it's extremely clever the juxtaposition of the two end verses. It all evokes a powerful image and its so clever to compare love and grieving to a feeling of drowning or being at a dark space of mind. There's lots you can take from this, i think.
And i normally don't like poetry but this is so lovely.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Bella! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, especially the final part. That final part cut deep for me. I'm glad you could feel its depth. I appreciate you stopping by and giving this a read even though you usually don't read poetry. That humbles me that you chose my words. Thanks for giving this a read!

[Nightfeather]

This poem was so deep that I had trouble to see it. Just kidding but your poem has made me smile and cry at the same time. You are really gifted, for you have written another god-tier poem. Your poems should be used by culture teachers all around the world to bestow your brilliance in their students minds. Reading your poems makes me always hungry for more. When I have more time available, all your poems shall be read by me for they are so beautiful and must be read. I will say this in every review, for it is the undeniable truth. You are man with great talent, so never stop writing.

Good job :D

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I am seriously so grateful for the words that you write to me about these pieces! You have no idea, I appreciate you so much! I'm very happy you enjoyed this one! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within these words! I would be beyond honored and humbled if any teacher anywhere ever used something that I had written to teach something. I appreciate you saying that! Thank you so much for reading this and thank you for your support!

[Nightfeather]

No problem, your deserve it :)

[Weeping willow]

Beautiful in images that flow through both these poems;]

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked these two poems! Thanks for stopping by and checking them out!

[PANDORA]

I have read a few of your pieces and each time it is like I feel I cannot breath. The vivid imagery you create brings the reader to their knees feeling the pain. Trapped with regret and heartbreak. Thank you for the great read.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you are able to feel the pain and emotion within my words. We can all relate to pain. And when we relate to someone else's pain, it in a way, helps us cope with our own and them with theirs. Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[Irenic]

you have made the essence of affection possible to smell.

great write Colton.

like it.

:)

Thanks for sharing.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for the kind words! I appreciate you giving this a read!

[Irenic]

welcome...................:)

[Olivia]

Every piece of yours I have read are always very addicting. I just can't stop writing. I assume your cfuture career in writing is going to be very bright.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Olivia! Your words are too kind! I'm happy that you enjoy my writings so much! You have made my night by saying that! I appreciate you saying that I may have a bright future, that means more than you will ever know! Thank you so much for your support and encouragement! Thank you for reading this piece!

[Ellay]

This was really good. I was instantly roped in and could not stop reading. :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping by and checking this one out!