Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

Sometimes we go through "Winters" in our lives...

Devil on my Shoulder

A Poem by Colton Warr

You should set her free

Unleash her to this world without you

To you, heartbreak is nothing new 

I beg of you, I plea 

Unshackle her from your chains

What are you trying to prove?

She is something you can afford to lose

I promise, it won't feel like a million pains

Let the winter make you cold 

Pull the trigger, be bold 

You will find a new hand to hold

One whose hair and heart will be gold 

Escape this mirage 

Your emotions a messy collage 

Temptation a bearing barrage 

Give in to me, please 

I can make it a breeze 

Again I say, you should set her free

   *****

Winters Interlude

A Poem by Colton Warr 

My heart burns with your desire

A fireplace melting the night for our love

Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir

You, my love, I put nothing above

Even though we are apart, I can feel your heat 

Saving me from this brutal winter 

Lay your head on my heartbeat 

Watch how fast I can become a sinner

I can still smell the aroma of your flame 

Blazing out of control 

You are something that cannot be tame

Would you please burn down my soul 

But what if this flame of ours goes out? 

What if the cold returns? 

All of our heat doused 

And what if I see her...

Don't let the winter make you cold 

But what if my eyes go astray? 

And I see her green and gold 

Would she be enough to take me away? 

I would then be graced with a different heat

You cast aside and sold 

You without a heartbeat 

I am warm and you are cold 

Reviews

[Devons]

I wondered at first why these two poems were placed here together but I think they are two sides of the same coin. They could be separate, but they could also be all one, in a sense. Their coupling together works too well though, I think, for them to be completely separated.
I recognise in both pieces something of myself, and when taken together that identification is even stronger. It takes thought and feeling, an objective introspection to observe the complexities of one's own character, and the regretful negatives that arise from experience. In essence, an honest appraisal of the shortcomings of human nature. It's relatively rare, I think, to come across a wisdom and honesty from the male perspective (possibly because it is so often perceived as dislikeable - particularly by women).
I believe the greatest strength in writing is a sense of reality, and seeing things for what they are (there is wisdom in acceptance). But also, being able to do this with meaning and depth poetically reinforces that strength. However imperfectly. I think you achieved that here.

[Colton Warr]

Well thank you very much! I spent many nights trying to decide whether I wanted these two to be two separate pieces or apart of the same one. Ultimately I felt as you do, I thought their coupling worked too well for me not to put them together. I'm happy you were able to see yourself in this piece, I think many of us can relate. I agree that a sense of reality is important in a writers work. I think that offers a certain feeling of relation for the reader and allows them to, for a moment, connect with the writer and the thoughts and emotion that they are conveying. Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece here! Thank you for stopping by and giving it a read!

[Steve L.]

Winter can exist intrinsically and extrinsically...excellent piece.

[Colton Warr]

Exactly, well said! Thanks for giving this a read! I'm glad you liked it!

[Steve L.]

My pleasure!

[dan]

Colton, I can say the same thing about both of these tied-together poems. Your basic idea for each are good ones, good starting points and trajectories for poems. I mean this in a constructive way when I tell you that, at some points, you seem to be straining for rhymes instead of capturing the free flow of what's in your heart. Now, how do I know this? It's because I tend to do the same things myself at times. Maybe you should try what I do? After I finish a write I look it over really well. Sometimes the best course is to be willing to abandon the plan to rhyme and write it free verse style. Both these poems have all the makings of excellent writes, they just need to ebb and flow more naturally. I hope you're not offended by my suggestion; like I said, I'm prone to the same things. Keep writing! take care...dan

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much Dan, I do appreciate the constructive criticism! You actually may be spot on here. Sometimes I think I may be trying to strain some of my rhymes. I am actually going to take you advise and work on that a bit and try it on one of my up coming poems. Thanks again for the positive criticism and encouragement! And thanks for reading Dan!

[dan]

It's my pleasure. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. take care...dan

[Mayank]

Beautiful! I love winters because the cold outside make me feel what I am inside.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed! Thank you for reading!

[ashleymarie]

Beautiful!
Absolutely beautiful!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much Ashley Marie!! I'm glad you liked this! Thanks for reading!

[ashleymarie]

No problem!
And I did...I really enjoyed it!!
Keep it up!

[DoormanDan]

Both of these poems are beautifully written, and they certainly generate a perfect atmosphere. Great work :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! Thanks for giving this a read! I'm happy you enjoyed them!

[Warren Daniel II]

I really enjoyed both of these poems these lines stood out for me "My heart burns with your desire
A fireplace melting the night for our love
Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir
You, my love, I put nothing above" they were so beautifully written. Great Job

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much Warren! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this! Your words mean a lot! Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!

[AaronFreitas]

Beautiful work Colton! I really enjoyed the flow of the poems and the rhyme schemes you used. I love creative rhyming as it is just that much more of a challenge to write a great piece. You have done an awesome job!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much Aaron!! Thank you for the kind words, I'm happy you enjoyed this! Thanks for reading!

[Isabella Disney]

I love this. I can feel emotion spilling from these words onto the audience

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much Isabella! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for reading!

[Roshan Nair]

The two pieces are dichotomous wonders, such extreme ends of the emotional realities are being painted here side by side, its really beautiful, what you have created here. cheers

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Roshan! I appreciate the kind words and I appreciateyoutaking the time out to read this! Thanks again!

[Lizardo]

both of the poems are stellear! Man you write some good stuff.
This is raelly good and full of emotions, I love the flow and rhyming of the poem

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much Lizardo!! Thanks for the kind words, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for reading!

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!