Devil On My Shoulder/Winters Interlude

Sometimes we go through "Winters" in our lives...

Devil on my Shoulder

A Poem by Colton Warr

You should set her free

Unleash her to this world without you

To you, heartbreak is nothing new 

I beg of you, I plea 

Unshackle her from your chains

What are you trying to prove?

She is something you can afford to lose

I promise, it won't feel like a million pains

Let the winter make you cold 

Pull the trigger, be bold 

You will find a new hand to hold

One whose hair and heart will be gold 

Escape this mirage 

Your emotions a messy collage 

Temptation a bearing barrage 

Give in to me, please 

I can make it a breeze 

Again I say, you should set her free

   *****

Winters Interlude

A Poem by Colton Warr 

My heart burns with your desire

A fireplace melting the night for our love

Your voice sounds of a thousand Angels in a choir

You, my love, I put nothing above

Even though we are apart, I can feel your heat 

Saving me from this brutal winter 

Lay your head on my heartbeat 

Watch how fast I can become a sinner

I can still smell the aroma of your flame 

Blazing out of control 

You are something that cannot be tame

Would you please burn down my soul 

But what if this flame of ours goes out? 

What if the cold returns? 

All of our heat doused 

And what if I see her...

Don't let the winter make you cold 

But what if my eyes go astray? 

And I see her green and gold 

Would she be enough to take me away? 

I would then be graced with a different heat

You cast aside and sold 

You without a heartbeat 

I am warm and you are cold 

Reviews

[Devons]

I wondered at first why these two poems were placed here together but I think they are two sides of the same coin. They could be separate, but they could also be all one, in a sense. Their coupling together works too well though, I think, for them to be completely separated.
I recognise in both pieces something of myself, and when taken together that identification is even stronger. It takes thought and feeling, an objective introspection to observe the complexities of one's own character, and the regretful negatives that arise from experience. In essence, an honest appraisal of the shortcomings of human nature. It's relatively rare, I think, to come across a wisdom and honesty from the male perspective (possibly because it is so often perceived as dislikeable - particularly by women).
I believe the greatest strength in writing is a sense of reality, and seeing things for what they are (there is wisdom in acceptance). But also, being able to do this with meaning and depth poetically reinforces that strength. However imperfectly. I think you achieved that here.

[Colton Warr]

Well thank you very much! I spent many nights trying to decide whether I wanted these two to be two separate pieces or apart of the same one. Ultimately I felt as you do, I thought their coupling worked too well for me not to put them together. I'm happy you were able to see yourself in this piece, I think many of us can relate. I agree that a sense of reality is important in a writers work. I think that offers a certain feeling of relation for the reader and allows them to, for a moment, connect with the writer and the thoughts and emotion that they are conveying. Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece here! Thank you for stopping by and giving it a read!

[Connie]

excellent writing, I am impressed

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Connie! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thank you so much for giving it a read!

[Nightfeather]

You have made the right choice to let both two of your poems entwine in each other. They follow each other up nicely and it looks like they cannot life without each other. I really wonder how or when your writing became so god like. For I can't stop reading your poems. They engrave themselves in my mind and replaces the view of myself with the one who wrote it. For you have a talent of making your poems immersive and unique. One can only relate and dream of the words that your poems have formed in his/her head. You have blown me away again, for this and the rest of your poems rival the art of the gods.

Good job :D

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much!! I'm glad you enjoyed these two poems intertwined together! I'm glad you could relate to what this poem has to say. That is very important to me. I want to be heard and understood by everyone and I want my words to tell my story but also give everyone a chance to relate to their story through my words. Again, I must say, your words are too kind! I am humbled by your kindness and encouragement! Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[Nightfeather]

No problem my friend. I am glad that I can give you happiness when I review your awesome poems. I also want people to understand the poems that I have written, because the most important thing to a writer is that his message is known by the writer :)

[Aeon]

Really great flow to it. "Watch how fast i can become a sinner". Awesome line!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I appreciate you stopping by and giving this piece a read!

[Sher A. Lynn]

So much pain, but liberated by your words. Thanks for the add btw. Looking forward to reviewing more of your work.

[Colton Warr]

I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, Sher! I'm looking forward to reviewing some of your work as well! Thanks for giving this a read!

[marcus]

beautiful writing, full of meaning and emotion and rhymes, really enjoyed them!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Marcus! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving this a read!

[fattycbreezy52]

Nailed it dude.
You have showcased some poems which I can really afford to buy.Yes,I would still prefer the fragments of your poetry to those imported swiss and Belgian chocolates.Wish we could actually buy the amazing pieces of our favourite writers on writer'scafe.
Keep writing:)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! Haha your words are too kind! This is one of the best reviews Ive ever received! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this to the point where you would pay for it (and prefer it over chocolate) That's awesome to hear! Thank you so much for taking the time out to read this piece!

[Michelle Coleman]

Devil On My Shoulder

Maybe it is because I am writing a tale of Hades and Persephone, but I find it difficult to picture anything else while reading this poem. And, of course, they represent Winter's capture and imprisonment of Spring.
That plea tends to come through the dark night of the soul as we feel ourselves turn rigid and cold before the burning heat takes hold.

Perhaps you will let me borrow it for an intro to my book. 😉 you have captured the emotions perfectly. I love it.

Winter's Interlude

The war we wage within when doing what we feel is right for another... It seems like a selfless act, but really both are set free. Even though it usually takes time to recognize that. All those fears leave us despondent in our empty and cold beds. The guilt of moving on can bring much shame.

Sympathy for the Devil is what I feel when reading this second poem.

Both are very well done.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Michelle! Your words are so kind! And I thank you for that! Reviews like yours are what encourages me to keep writing. Thank you for that positivity! I'm so glad you enjoyed both of these poems! I love that your review is so detailed and explains what these made you feel. Too many reviews these days are becoming just a simple "good job" or "I really liked this" So thank you for that. I'm glad you were able to relate to these, I'm glad they made you feel something. As far as you using the first one for the intro to your book, perhaps we can discuss that! ;) It does sound like an interesting book! Seriously, if you're really interested message me and we can talk about it. Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[Michelle Coleman]

I do love these poems. Even the seconds reflecthow Hades prefers to see his union with Persephone.

And I agree. A lot of reviewers do not provide too much feedback, but I love the ones who do. Especially the ones who catch mistakes and show me where I can improve a scene or mood. I sent you a message. 😄

[SleeplessVolcano]

It is very cold, these winters of our souls. You have captured well, on both poems the desolation we experience in these dark patches of life. At least we can look forward to spring!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! I appreciate you stopping by and giving this a read! I'm glad you liked it! You have no idea how ready i am for spring and summer!

[Nila M.]

Great write! Really captures those feelings that we've all had to some on degree or another in our own individual ways. I really liked the phrase, "a million pains". Sometimes it is like being overwhelmed with a million pains. I also appreciated the two part structure and the interplay of the winter season. Thank you for sharing this.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so very much Nila! I'm glad you were able to relate to this. I hope that people can do that in all of my pieces. They are all based off of something in my life, usually exactly what I am going through at that current time when I publish it. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Nila M.]

Yes, I definitely can relate to this. And am drawn to reading things that might give me insight into some part of my own life. The feeling of being understood has immense value for human beings, and the words of someone else may sometimes give you peace and make you aware that we are a community of souls who often struggle through the same or similar bitter winters and it eases the burden and can even be joyous to realize that you're not alone. At least that's i feel.