Defiant

Sometimes we have to be Defiant in order to obtain freedom...

Defiant

A Poem by Colton Warr

Your will be done, as I come undone

You fail to see it, she is the one

But your way is true, your way is right

I am sorry, but I can no longer stand by your side

 

Your will be done, as I come undone

Can I be honest? All I want is to run

You reject and rebuild the way you see fit

I am sorry, but I will no longer submit

 

Your will be done, as I come undone

I am exhausted, has this only just begun?

I tried to keep everything together

I am sorry, I can no longer tread this stormy weather

 

My declaration be heard, my defiance be heard

My chains forever unshackled and burned

My life is mine to live

I am sorry, but I no longer need you in it  

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

Freedom is good but it always come with a price, for one must first sacrifice something in order to gain freedom. For one can be released of his/her pain but the process of breaking your shackles is a hellish nightmare. I feel that you had it rough while you were writing this. For your words made a strong and determined impact on my heart. I really liked this poem, for I was in comparable state once. The thirst for freedom was tormenting but when salvation was reached, my heart became much lighter, for it had dropped the weight that suppressed my freedom and happiness. This poem is a masterpiece.

Good job :D

[Colton Warr]

You're exactly right, freedom always comes at a price. Sometimes that price takes a toll on you. As long as you obtain the freedom it is all worth it. I'm glad these words could make an impact on you. We all go through these testing times. They define us and make us the human we are today. Thank you very much for giving this a read!

[Nightfeather]

You are right and thank you for sharing this epic poem with the world :)

[Red3Bravo]

You get so much more effect out of those last two lines than most of the rest of the poem, I wonder if the rhyme scheme in the earlier stanzas is holding you back. I like three repetitions, though. I feel like that almost matches those final lines.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate the read and review! You may be correct about those rhyme schemes kind of holding me back in this one but I decided to post it how it was. It was quite the relief to pen this one during that time period in my life. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[David Berger]

If anything speaks to the title of this poem, it's the last line. It's empowering yet filled with an underlying pain. Even though other lines begin with "I am sorry," something that tells me that the speaker does feel sorrow for the loss, but has had to make a choice for his/her own benefit ("I no longer need you in it"). Like "An Undelivered Poem," you mention a "she" just once, and I take that to be a glimpse of who the speaker has chosen to separate from, but the focus is indeed on the speaker. I enjoyed this poem.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, David! I'm happy you enjoyed this piece and especially the last line! I'm glad you could feel the pain in that last line. You hit it right on the head, my good friend! This poem is filled with sorrow, yet also filled with defiance and independence, shattering the chains that previously held one in bondage. I appreciate the kind words and am very happy you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[Maja]

Those last two lines are especially heartbreaking, making them the perfect ending to this piece. It sounds to me as if the persona is talking to God and telling Him all these things, am I correct? In any case, wonderful writing. :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Maja! I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece, especially the ending like that. I appreciate the kind and positive words! That is a very interesting interpretation that you have. I actually penned it based off of what I was going through with my parents at the time. They imposed their will upon me and it affected almost every aspect of my life. So the chains had to be broken, in a sense. We still talk and all that but I am much more independent now. I love your interpretation of the poem, though. I can see this poem being a conversation with God. Thanks for stopping by and giving this a read!

[Maja]

Ohhhhh. Well, I understand. Good to know you're independent now! :) And you're welcome. :)

[jeannemarie coulter]

good thought provoking reading...the emotion is powerful and in a way healing...

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you could feel the emotion and I'm glad it felt as a sort of healing! Thanks for giving this one a read!

[WordShaker33]

Great poem. I could feel the emotion as I read it. Good work

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within each word as you read. Thanks for giving this a read!

[WordShaker33]

Of course! I was happy to read such a good piece of writing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You capture a controlled and articulate defiance in this piece Colton.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you, John! Sometimes in life we must be defiant to someone or something that is holding us back from doing something that we love or being with someone we love. We must always stand up for what we believe in and defend our values. They are all that we have at the end of the day. Thanks for giving this one a read!

[KLGreen]

This reads almost like a song for me. As I read it a melody played in my head and I sang along. Loved it.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I agree, it does kind of read like a song! Perhaps I should see if someone I know can make it into one? I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, thanks for reading!

[Freda Winchester]

Reading through a few of your poems - I'm jealous of the way poetry seems to come so naturally to you!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Freda! Your words are so kind! I appreciate you saying that! I'm glad you like my poetry! Thanks for reading!

[Helena]

good way to break up and take a revange! strong words, could hurt deeply if aimed right!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Helena! Sometimes, when the heart spills out, it hurts people. But we must learn to move on from those who hold us down. Thanks for reading!