She is...

A small dose...

She is…
A Poem by Colton Warr

I am saved,
As shock and electricity sizzle through my veins
A furious flow of a feeling so new to me
She is glowing like lights in the city

I am enamored,
As I look at her, butterflies prevent proper use of grammar
A star in the sky entrancing my gaze
She is the cause of all of my happy days

I am overwhelmed,
As I am abducted and taken to her realm
A different planet I am on, yet scared I am not
She is a creation in which beauty she is infinitely beyond

I am happy,
As simple as that may be, I am happy
A search thought to be lost, yet here I am found
She is a wild flower to which I am bound

She is a ray from the sun, never to be brought down
She is a queen with a diamond crown
She is a hurricane crashing into me
She is the clearest and most dazzling of waves from an endless sea
She is outer space and all things breath taking and unknown
She is perfect…I want to be the reason she will never be alone
She is a thief in the night, stealing my heart, perhaps
She is, she is…but I don’t want it back.

Reviews

[Giulia King]

"I am enamored,
As I look at her, butterflies prevent proper use of grammar
A star in the sky entrancing my gaze" Beautifully written.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Giullia! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thank you for giving this piece a read!

[Nightfeather]

This poem was indeed a small dose...For It has made me thirsty for more. This poem has gripped my heart, and it forced all your emotions into it. You have made my day happier and I hope that I will one day be on the same level as your godly poems. I don't know how you do it but your poems are otherworldly beautiful and the brilliance stunned me.

Good job :D

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within this one! I'm glad my words could make your day happier! It is an honor! Your words are so kind and encouraging! I am grateful that you speak so highly of my words! I will be able to look at some of your work later on this week! Thank you so much for giving this a read!

[Nightfeather]

No problem friend. I am honored to be your fan. I want to see you become super famous, so I can say: I have been his fan before it was even cool (hipster) :P

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Love, passion and obsession, all packed in one poem.
Small dose but a strong one.
Really liked how you described her as the glowing lights in the city.
A beautiful piece of a foregone heart that is not to be returned.
Enjoyed it!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Jyoti! Your words are too kind! I appreciate your encouragement and I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I'm happy you could feel the power and emotion in this small dose. Thanks for giving this a read!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[rickm97]

Great write, Colton.
And the good thing is...
...you don't want your heart back.
I'll go down that road anytime.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you liked this one! I am so glad I chose to go down that road. I would lose my heart to her all over again if I could. I appreciate you giving this a read and review!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This transformed nicely from interest to love to obsession but not too obsessed (meaning you don't get the feeling he is going to make a suit out of her) . I very much enjoyed the flow and phasing. The descriptions were lyrical and beautiful. Over all a beautiful piece great job.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Crystal! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and i'm glad you saw the poem go from the various stages to the next, stronger as it goes. Thanks for stopping by and giving this one a read!

[guy drori]

Well you can really tell she means a lot to him. Even though you don't describe her much she sounds a bit dangerous. Starting with only a few "She is" and ending with "She is" after every line break really builds up his obsession for her and the tension.

[Colton Warr]

I'm glad you were able to feel the obsession as the poem went on. This girl meant the world to me but sadly, we are no longer together and it is my fault. I'm actually posting a new poem tonight about how I've been feeling lately and how much pain I've felt since our breakup. It was recent. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! It was always her favorite too! Thanks for giving it a read!

[guy drori]

Oh you mean it's really about you? that's a really nice piece. You built it up very nicely. Looking forward to reading the other one about how you've been feeling about it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Written with a haunting desire that leaves you at her mercy.

[Colton Warr]

Exactly, John! Well said. I'm glad you enjoyed this one, thanks for reading!

[DoormanDan]

Impressively well written, I must say! I love the atmosphere you created in this piece, and you certainly know your literary devices. None of the lines felt forced, and the whole thing flows fantastically. You have done a beautiful job with this piece! :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy that you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for giving it a read!

[goldifada]

and i will say that she is lucky :) .....................nice job

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much! i'm glad you enjoyed this piece, thank you so much for giving this a read! Perhaps, I am the lucky one?!

[goldifada]

yep!! who knows !! i will said it a second time i've enjoyed reading your piece!!

[Saddam]

I am happy,
As simple as that may be, I am happy
A search thought to be lost, yet here I am found
She is a wild flower to which I am bound

I am happy with "She is........... Lines"
Great write dear friend. I like it much.... Skillful write.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you for giving this one a read as well! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy that you enjoyed it!