the mystery

the shy romantic--me

 

i want you

i want you to know me

know everything

tell you everything

 

and nothing

 

i don’t want you to know

my birthday

full name

relationship and work history

i want it all

to remain a mystery

 

i want you

all of you

and nothing at all from you

except for the way you hold me

when we dance

your face in my hair

mine in yours

neck to neck

know my body

know my soul

but know nothing

except for this incredible mystery

 

the way an instant can feel perfect

when nothing else in life does

 

know that

 

know that i want you

to be as affectionate as you are

because i love it

i didn’t and don’t want

to let go

i love the nothingness of us

because we don’t know each other

i don’t want to know you

 

but i want you

 

can we just keep dancing?

inhaling each other

let’s not ask questions

let’s not tell truths

let’s not tell lies

let’s live in the now

without sexism

racism

ageism

expectations of society

 

let’s emancipate ourselves

 

keep wanting me

keep wrapping your arm

around my waist

like time will never pass

and we’ll never say goodbye

 

keep saying, “i thought you left”

and look at me

with those warm eyes

like you’re glad i returned

like it’s natural

for our bodies to meet

our souls to touch

 

keep talking to me

with those beautiful lips

i’ll keep watching them

but keep it simple

i will too

and we’ll keep dancing

where the lights are dim

where the people around us blur

where our senses heighten

and we’ll know the Secret

we’ll live the Mystery

we’ll be interconnected

 

without words

without knowing

but somehow knowing

 

 

we were meant to be

Reviews

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Woa.

*is speechless* Woa.

XD This is................... uh. Woa. Haha!

I just love this... a lot.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

I love this! Excellent flow, imagery, and a very excellent write! Passionate, questioning! Perfect!

[Alessander]

this doesn't seem too shy to me lol...it starts off with a bang, but by the end I thought it got too sentimental. The poem starts loosing its integrity with the stanza that begins with "Can we keep dancing?" (your passion burst forth but it becomes very fractured veering from descriptive to confessional to narrative); I kind of had the same problem when I wrote "I just want to get laid" so I just made that poem into 2 parts (and I have about 3 other parts, but they sucked so I just omitted them). Anyways, maybe you can do the same - one part being descriptive (the dancing, setting, concrete stuff) and the other part more confessional (the longing, knowing-vs-mystery stuff). That's just me though. I like this stanza best:
i don't want you to know

my birthday

full name

relationship

work history

i want

(none of it?)

[DUALFISH320]

I SO WISH FOR THAT TOO. THE NEWNESS OF NOT KNOWING. I WAS TRANSPORTING BACK TO NOT KNOWING AND I THANK YOU :)

[Everett DeValle]

I had to read this again. Lovely write. ~Ev

[Julian]

This is very touchable writing (if that makes any sense!), very simple expression yet all the more powerful for it. I have often commented on your alternative style and you have maintained that with this piece.Your style is unique and you succeed at "modern" without descending into utter nonsense. As i began this review so shall i end it by saying you can almost reach out and touch this. Can you tell i liked it? :) Julian

[Everett DeValle]

Ah, this is so endearing to hear your soul pen such lovely lines. Very deep meanings. A wonderful read Co Co. I truly enjoyed. ~Ev