On a foggy night

free verse; inspired by stars

I love foggy nights,

seeing specks of mist play in the sky

as stars, with their faint beams,

peer through dusty clouds ...

humid air seeping through my lungs

as I daze upon my dreams.

On nights like this,

I see faces hidden in the stars,

and they have eyes as real and piercing

as the demons dancing in my imagination.

I envision them ―

their piercing gazes 

concealed behind distant darkness 

and fuming fog.

Tonight,

I'm among those stars,

a fiery inferno raging within me.

Step too close,

and the flame within my eyes

will scorch your bare skin,

for tonight,

my heart is sharper

than a raven's claw

pierced through stainless steel.

My soul surges with freedom,

as my speech,

like space and time itself,

resembles the clamorous sounds 

of a soft symphony,

shattering like painted glass

against a shrouded rose.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. Please leave an honest review. Constructive criticism is more than welcome.

The rough draft of this piece can be found in my blog.

Reviews

[Emily L]

I love foggy nights as well. On those nights, the nighttime reveals to us secrets it's been hiding in the sky during dusk. The fog reveals to us how the mist and the stars come out to play in the darkness. Very lovely descriptive poem. The way you look at the nighttime is truly beautiful. Very pleasant read William...I loved it!

[William Liston]

Thank you, Emily ... that's a wonderful way to put it : )

[tanmay7551]

Made me remember my childhood and star gazing experience from terrace. Now it looks like too out of reach. Well done! Foggy nights and star gazing.. Love it!

[Raven Moonchild]

Wow,this is truly amazing. :)

[William Liston]

Thank you.

[Black Jess]

As I was reading this , I saw fireworks and magical lights dancing upon your beautiful words *-* . I was imagining everything you said and I was bewildered ! I Love the way you conmbinated between the stars , the heart , freedom , fire ... And the way you described this " foggy night " made me love it more ( because I love foggy nights too ) . You know , You use some sorts of words , so deep and far-fetched that make me go seach for them in the dictionnary ( not only in this one but in all your writings ).I must say that I've learned a lot of vocabulary throughout your poems *-* .
I love it william , Fantastic Writing .

[William Liston]

Glad you could enjoy and relate to this poem, Jess.
Your uplifting reviews always make me smile.

[Black Jess]

Yours too ! Really , they give me such a self-confidence !!! ^^

[Giulia King]

I love the picture and any poem that has stars in them. They truly are magical, just like this poem :)

[William Liston]

I agree; stars are magical.
Thank you for your kind words.

[Relic]

With technology and cell phone towers, it makes it hard to see those glorious constellations where I live. Favorite line: my heart is sharper than a raven's claw
pierced through stainless steel.

I enjoyed.

[William Liston]

To be honest, I rarely see stars at night either ... the night skies are usually starless where I live.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[richieb]

Willam,
I enjoyed the imagery your words created. First a subtle change from enjoying natures spectacle to becoming part of it. I felt the change in emotions as the poem became more spiritual. Nice write.
Richie b.

[William Liston]

Thank you, Richie.
I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Dtrab1]

Written with a lot of heart, but straight forward & imaginative.

[William Liston]

Thank you.

[mum]

I love how this is dangerous yet inviting. it warns you to stay away but asks you to come close . awesome work !!

[William Liston]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Shabeeh Haider]

It has been years since I have really gazed at the night sky. Your words have taken me back in time...when love was young and thoughts were wild...it was a time when I used to lie in the grass for hours on end and gaze at the stars.
Very beautifully written.

[William Liston]

Thank you for your kind words.