Between Life and Art

free verse

I want to reach with you

~ for us to outstretch our palms

towards the gleaming sun

and grasp that mystery

between life and art

~ to let our fingers

meet with whispering wind,

intertwining in its gentle caress

amid the light of our smiles.

Sometimes I wonder

how such a moment

comes to life,

one where heaven chimes

its gentle harp

and time interlaces

with our fingertips,

caressing our hearts

in the warmth

of a distant flame.

I want to live with you,

somewhere between

the softness of a glowing moon

and the tumultuous clash

of an ocean against its shore,

or where fiery lava cools

at the touch of rain,

as if it were but passion

grasping for a softer hand.

I want us to embrace life,

to feel its flaring heat

and touch the waking of its sighs.

Like a spark ignites a candle,

I want something so intense

yet so delicate.

Author's Note

I realized that I hadn't written any free verse in a while and (after half an hour of scribbling down random thoughts) I finally managed to carve one out. I'm not sure if this piece makes sense or not, but does it at least have an impact? Please leave an honest review. Constructive criticism is more than welcome. I would especially appreciate any advice regarding the last stanza as I feel I could've ended this piece a lot stronger.

Reviews

[Fahmida Mehreen]

"I want to live with you,
somewhere between
the softness of a glowing moon
and the tumultuous clash
of an ocean against its shore,

or where fiery lava cools
at the touch of rain,
as if it were but passion
grasping for a softer hand."

Portrayal of an invincible love. Most people in love, aiming for their dreams together shall ditto this. After all, this life is too short to be hopeless. :)

Thank you for sharing this.

[William Liston]

I'm glad to see you back! Haven't heard from you in a while.
Thank you for your kind words.

[lightsong]

Dear William,

I don't know if You can read my words or hear my voice from here anymore, but something inside me keeps telling me that one day You will be here again igniting our site with Your brilliance, to find my way into this specific piece of Yours where You left me in awe again to Your majestic pen wondering how can a 17 old boy write with this maturity, with this great amount of mature emotions, almost like a full grown-up man, the needs that settle deep inside You are expanding beyond Your frame, to need the passion when You feel the essence of manhood ruling every cell, yet to need the gentleness when You feel Your "being's essence" safe like a child inside his mom's womb, Your last verse is sulime and stunning, I can keep speaking about its meaning for an hour, I would only suggest to Your request to separate "Delicate" and put it alone in the next line, in that way You give a pause and then a strong ending.

I think of You often, praying You are all right. remember, You are greatly missed here 💖

[heavenscentgirl1]

Hey William, I’m glad to see you back on WC ... you were missed my friend.

[Black Jess]

The strong emotion of Love is so well expressed in a pure and delicate way. Such a beautiful piece showing the art of life; when life is shared with someone dear and beloved, both sides can give parts of their souls to create something marvellous, a perfetc combination, an Art. So life can become a real paiting of art when it's lived with good people for good reaons !
I peticulary love this part :
I want to live with you,
somewhere between
the softness of a glowing moon
and the tumultuous clash
of an ocean against its shore,

and the last stanza was very clever in my opinion, someone who can set you on fire, illuminate you and make you feel alive but at the same time it can be so nice and soft and delicate !

Wonderful Work William, Wonderful ! *-*

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Between Life and Art"
William Liston,
This poem speaks to the joy of experiencing creation.
But it's beauty is more satisfying shared with another.
Beginning line:
"I want to reach with you,
for us to outstretch our palms
towards the gleaming sun
and grasp that mystery"
Speaking of mystery.. the identity with another
is what the human heart cries for; to see, to
know another face to face.
Second stanza:
To let our fingers
meet with whispering wind
intertwining in its gentle caress
amid the light of our smiles"
There is so much more here which
is really bright and inspiring.
Especially with the entrance of Spring
and every new fragrant honor of flowers
and gardening in earnest.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I feel so calm and convinced reading this. It speaks out your typical style and pro-like hard work.
Probably, these are just scribbled random thoughts, but these do make sense and impact.
The message us simple, bit conveyed in a twisted sense.
My favorites!:)

[William Liston]

Thank you for your kind words, Tazeen.
I'm glad you enjoyed.

[mum]

I feel it was a super honest piece and it felt genuine... the end felt undone ... I loved it . something so real within the words. If ever I can't finish a poem i usually tie the beginning back in. hope that helped. great work.

[William Liston]

Thank you for your advice. I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Diamond]

"I want to live with you,
somewhere between
the softness of a glowing moon
and the tumultuous clash
of an ocean against its shore,"

You wrote that you love to watch the horizon. The above lines do show that. Such a sweet and soft writing, that shows the deep desire to share love. Love this poem, as I do with many of your writings.

[William Liston]

I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you for reviewing.

[Isabella Ivy]

You can definitely feel the desire and I love 'passion with a softer hand'! :) I.I.

[William Liston]

Thank you.

[Isabella Ivy]

Most welcome!

[Giulia King]

The third and fourth verse are absolutely beautiful! A very well written piece. The last two lines are perfect. Great job, Will :)

[William Liston]

I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you for reviewing.