Outstanding piece ! There is life in this write and one is forced( positively) to feel the emotions behind. When I speak of pain-. A very apt title to this piece. I also find a sublime link of your poem -pain and pen in this write.
Wanting to be heard, a desire to let out those painful emotions and what not. When in pain, everything seems dim and lifeless, and tears become reality of our existence. Wonderful write and all the three stanzas are equally emoting.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You're right. This poem and "Pain and a Pen" are very similar, both structurally and thematically. I.. read moreYou're right. This poem and "Pain and a Pen" are very similar, both structurally and thematically. I do, however, put "Pain and a Pen" above this piece because the imagery is more vivid.
Anyways, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and were able to grasp the message and emotion behind its words. It truly makes me happy. Thanks again for your kind words.
Aw, William!
You so deeply honor me again by composing in one of my original forms, the Fours 'n Eights (Bound Hearts http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1774696/ is an example with the rules for any who wish to learn it) … only difference is your fours are stacked, but the undeniable smooth, rhythmic effect is just as impacting when formatted in this way.
I must commend you, too, on how you've taken a deep and abiding part of most each of our hearts, souls, and minds and blended them with your own to express in a manner many would wish they had the skills to.
I bow in growing admiration at how masterfully yours have broadened since I first read you.
You may be young, My Friend, but there is nothing whatsoever immature about your art or in the way you apply it upon the canvas of our imaginations.
Brilliant word choices, arrangement, impressive grammar, emotive power, balanced and appealing presentation, etc; highlight this work.
This is excellent poetry of the highest caliber, William … I'm growing more envious! ⁓ Richard : )
(I really like your new avatar, too)
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, but I don't think this is in your form if you look at the rhyme scheme. Thank you.. read moreThank you so much, but I don't think this is in your form if you look at the rhyme scheme. Thank you so much for your compliments, Richard. It truly means a lot. (By the way, on my old account, you left a review of this poem that helped me in the editing process).
8 Years Ago
Ahhh, I see!
The aa and cc rhymes are the difference … duhhh!
I thought I'd reviewed.. read moreAhhh, I see!
The aa and cc rhymes are the difference … duhhh!
I thought I'd reviewed this before, but memory seems to be slipping as dotage encroaches … LOL!
I liked this poem and especially the flow of this poem and the way you expressed your feelings and carved it in this nice poem....
a short , simple and sweet poems...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
take care..
riddhi
" My heart is torn, an art is born" I love this line so much. It is such a great one to draw a reader in. This piece is so well written. The flow, everything. I absolutely adore this piece.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I'm glad you liked the flow. Thank you for your compliments.
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